Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tenses and articles), and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details linked with simple connectors (e.g. because, so, and). Keep the answer under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I always like to look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. I prefer to sit in the passenger seat or next to the window on a bus because I enjoy the changing views and it relaxes me.

제안: Be more concise and correct collocations (e.g. 'a lot of photos', 'photographing landscapes'). Use linking words to organise the detail (e.g. 'especially' or 'for example') and give one specific example to support your answer.

예시: Yes, I take a lot of photos of the scenery when I travel by car. For example, I often photograph countryside sunsets because the colours and atmosphere are so beautiful.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and correct common grammar errors (articles, verb forms, and word order). Avoid filler words and repeat fewer short phrases; instead, add one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g. 'because' and 'also').

예시: I prefer the sea because it helps me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking on the beach and breathing the fresh sea breeze, which makes me feel calm and happy.

× 'Of course I like to look out the window at the scenery.'

✓ 'Of course, I like to look out of the window at the scenery.'

'Out of the window' or 'out the window' both occur in speech, but 'look out of the window' is clearer and more formal. Add a comma after 'Of course' for correct punctuation and natural pause.'

× 'When I traveling to bus or car, I prefer to sit in passenger seat when I go the when I drive the car and when I go into the bus I like to sit near the window seat and it make me happy that's.'

✓ 'When I travel by bus or car, I prefer to sit in the passenger seat; when I drive the car I sit in the driver's seat, and when I take the bus I like to sit near the window because it makes me happy.'

'When I traveling' is incorrect; use base form 'travel' after when for simple present habit. Use correct prepositions: 'by bus' and 'by car' or 'drive the car'. Use articles: 'the passenger seat' and 'the window' or 'window seat'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it make me happy' -> 'it makes me happy'. Remove redundant phrases and restructure sentence into clearer clauses.'

× 'Of course, I have lot of photos of sceneries because I enjoy photographing of the landscape and sceneries when I travel by car and I like to capture interesting views especially at sunset in the countryside because the collection makes me happy.'

✓ 'Of course, I have a lot of photos of scenery because I enjoy photographing landscapes and scenes when I travel by car, and I like to capture interesting views, especially at sunset in the countryside, because collecting them makes me happy.'

'Lot' requires an article: 'a lot of'. 'Sceneries' is usually uncountable or plural 'scenery' or use 'scenes'/'landscapes'. Remove unnecessary 'of' after 'photographing'. Use plural 'landscapes' and 'scenes' for variety. 'The collection makes me happy' is awkward; 'collecting them' clarifies the subject.'

× 'Actually, I like sea.'

✓ 'Actually, I like the sea.'

'Sea' as a noun referring to the sea in general normally takes the definite article 'the'.'

× 'When I'm in the sea I just feel I'm relaxing as well as when I'm walking in the beach I'm just get nice, breathe.'

✓ 'When I'm at the sea I just feel relaxed, and when I'm walking on the beach I just feel good and can breathe more easily.'

'In the sea' suggests being in the water; use 'at the sea' or 'by the sea' for being near it. 'I just feel I'm relaxing' is unnatural; use adjective 'relaxed'. 'Walking in the beach' should be 'walking on the beach'. 'I'm just get nice, breathe' is ungrammatical; change to 'feel good and can breathe more easily.' Tense remains simple present to describe habitual feelings.'

× 'I like sea breeze and it makes me happy.'

✓ 'I like the sea breeze, and it makes me happy.'

'Sea breeze' referring to the breeze from the sea usually takes the definite article 'the' in this context. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity.'

× 'I enjoy my time in the beach.'

✓ 'I enjoy my time on the beach.'

'In the beach' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the beach'. Also no article change needed if speaking generally, but 'on the beach' is the standard phrase.'