Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用词和语法需要改进并使表述更自然；回答应更简洁并按规则提供主题句和一到两句具体细节。注意时态一致（如过去经历用过去时），纠正拼写和短语（如 “look out” 而不是 “locked out” / “tower bus” 可能是 “tour bus”）。建议练习用一至两句主题句直接回答，再用一两句具体描述支持。

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus. For example, when I visited Okinawa last year, I took a tour bus and spent the whole trip watching the beaches, the clear sea and local people on the shore.

제안: 表达较清楚但句子结构不够自然，部分短语冗长或不准确。建议使用更自然的语序（例如直接说 “I seldom take photos”），并用连词使逻辑更流畅，减少重复。可以补充一两个具体例子说明何时会拍照。

예시: I seldom take photos out of a moving car because it's hard to keep my phone steady. However, if the view is really beautiful — for example, a colorful sunset over the mountains — I will quickly take a picture despite the movement.

제안: 回答不够直接，开头犹豫词“MMM”应避免。表述混乱，时态和句子连接不够准确，应先给出明确偏好（mountains or sea），然后用一到两句具体原因或例子支持。改进拼写和语法（例如 “I visited Okinawa last year”）。

예시: I prefer the sea because I enjoy relaxing on the beach. For example, when I visited Okinawa last year, I saw fish in the clear water and spent time drinking juice by the shore, which was very relaxing.

× Yes, I will look at the window to see the scenery while I travel by bus.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window to see the scenery when I travel by bus.

句子描述的是一般习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时而不是将来时。将“I will look”改为“I look”，并把“at the window”改为更常用的“out of the window”或“out the window”，同时把“while I travel”改为更自然的“when I travel”。建议：描述习惯用一般现在时，且固定短语为“look out of the window”。

× For example, I visit Okinawa last year, I used a tower bus and all the journey I locked out to see the beach, sea and the beautiful people.

✓ For example, I visited Okinawa last year. I used a tour bus and during the whole journey I looked out to see the beach, the sea and the beautiful scenery.

句子谈及过去的经历，应使用一般过去时，故“I visit”改为“visited”。“tower bus”应为“tour bus”。“all the journey”更自然为“during the whole journey”。“locked out”是拼写/词汇错误，应为“looked out”。“the beautiful people”在此上下文不合适，改为“the beautiful scenery”。建议：谈过去事件用过去式，注意词汇拼写及搭配。

× It is because I have to stabilize the camera or cell phone.

✓ It is because I have to stabilize the camera or my cell phone.

原句缺少限定词导致不明确，应该在“cell phone”前加所有格或冠词，如“my cell phone”。注意单复数与冠词搭配。建议：提到具体物品时加限定词（a/an/the或my等）。

× The cell phone will be affected by the moving cars, but when the scenery is gorgeous, I will reach out to take the photo in a quick time.

✓ The cell phone is affected by the motion of the car, but when the scenery is gorgeous, I will quickly reach out to take a photo.

“affected by the moving cars”表达不自然，改为“affected by the motion of the car”。“in a quick time”是错误的短语，应改为副词“quickly”。“take the photo”改为不定冠词“take a photo”更自然。建议：注意固定搭配，用副词修饰动词并使用正确冠词。

× Seldom do I take photos of the scenery outside the vehicle window.

✓ I seldom take photos of the scenery outside the vehicle window.

倒装结构“Seldom do I…”虽然语法上可用，但在口语中更自然的顺序是“I seldom take…”。这里属于情态/用法选择问题，改为一般语序更贴近学生回答风格。建议：口语中可使用更自然的一般语序。

× MMM I wouldn't like to choose the sea.

✓ Hmm, I wouldn't like to choose the sea.

主要为口语填充词书写，时态问题不明显，但“MMM”应为“Hmm”。“wouldn't like to choose the sea”在表达偏好时更常用“I wouldn't choose the sea”或“I don't prefer the sea”。建议：表达偏好时使用“I don't prefer”或“I would rather not choose”。

× I often visit the sea areas like the tourist city which has the seaside, for example Okinawa.

✓ I often visit seaside areas, such as tourist cities with beaches, for example Okinawa.

原句时态混杂，“often visit”为一般现在时可表示习惯，保留为一般现在时更合适，但“visit the sea areas like the tourist city which has the seaside”表达冗长且有语法和词汇搭配问题，改为更地道的表达。建议：使用“seaside areas”或“tourist cities with beaches”来简洁表达。

× I visit that place last year, I saw sea fishes under the water and the beach and I can enjoy juice on the beach.

✓ I visited that place last year. I saw fish in the sea and the beach, and I could enjoy juice on the beach.

描述过去的经历应使用过去时，故“I visit”改为“visited”。“sea fishes”不自然，改为“fish in the sea”或“sea fish”。“I can enjoy”在描述过去经历应为“could enjoy”。建议：过去经历全部使用过去时，名词复数及搭配用法注意地道表达。