Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом естественный, но есть небольшие грамматические и стилистические ошибки. Сократите повторения (например, "look out the window" и "looking at the nature") и исправьте согласование: "It's really calms me down" неверно. Убедитесь, что не превышаете 4–5 предложений, используйте связку для плавности (например, 'because' или 'and'), и замените разговорные фразы на более точные формулировки. Также можно добавить небольшую деталь (виды, время дня) для конкретности.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling because I enjoy watching the landscape passing by. I find the trees and fields especially calming, and I often listen to soft music at the same time. This combination helps me relax during long journeys.

제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит повторения и неуклюжие формулировки ("enjoy the view the scenery myself", "at the time"). Сведите фразы к одной идее и используйте связующие слова (например, 'because' и 'so') для логики. Добавьте конкретную причину или пример, чтобы обосновать позицию и увеличить конкретность.

예시: I don't usually take photos because I prefer to experience the scenery directly rather than through a screen. For instance, when passing through a beautiful valley I try to remember the colours and shapes instead of photographing them.

제안: Ответ содержит повторения, разговорные слова и грамматические ошибки (повтор 'to to', 'because' несколько раз, 'makes' неправильно согласовано). Нужно сформулировать более чётко одну основную причину, убрать слова-паразиты ('you know', 'just like') и привести конкретный пример деталей гор (склоны, растительность, тропы). Используйте связующие слова (e.g., 'because', 'for example') и правильную грамматику.

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea because they offer more varied scenery and interesting details. For example, I enjoy walking along trails that reveal different slopes, rock formations and mountain plants, which makes the experience more engaging.

× Yes I do, I usually look out the window when traveling.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually look out the window when I travel.

The original mixes present simple with a gerund 'traveling' without a time reference. Use present simple 'I travel' for habitual actions. Also add necessary comma and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'when I travel' for habitual present actions and include punctuation.

× I like enjoying the view and looking at the nature we're passing by.

✓ I enjoy the view and look at the nature we're passing by.

Using 'like enjoying' is wordy and awkward; 'enjoy' is the correct verb. 'The nature' is incorrect article use; usually say 'nature' without 'the' unless specific. Suggested correction uses simpler verbs and removes the definite article. Suggestion: Prefer 'enjoy the view' and 'look at nature' or 'look at the scenery'.

× It's really calms me down, especially when I listen to some calm and soft music when I look outside.

✓ It really calms me down, especially when I listen to calm, soft music while I look outside.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It really calms me down' is correct but the original included extra 'is' making 'It's really calms' incorrect. Also avoid repeating 'when' twice; use 'while' for simultaneous actions and remove 'some' which is unnecessary. Use comma between adjectives 'calm, soft'. Suggestion: Use 'It really calms me down' + 'while' for simultaneous actions.

× I don't take the photos often because I like to enjoy the view the scenery myself without using any devices to capture it, just enjoying the moment at the time.

✓ I don't take photos often because I like to enjoy the scenery myself without using any devices to capture it; I just enjoy the moment.

Redundant article 'the' before 'photos' and 'the scenery' is awkward; use 'photos' and 'scenery' without 'the'. The phrase 'at the time' is unnecessary. Replace the gerund phrase 'just enjoying' with a full clause 'I just enjoy' for correct sentence structure and punctuation. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and avoid redundant articles.

× I prefer mountains to to the sea because looking at the mountains feels much more interesting because they have a lot of different details.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because looking at the mountains feels much more interesting; they have a lot of different details.

Doubled 'to' is a typo. Use 'the mountains' and 'the sea' when referring to general categories. Repeated 'because' can be replaced with a semicolon to avoid redundancy. 'They' correctly refers to 'mountains' (plural). Suggestion: Use 'I prefer the mountains to the sea' and avoid repeating conjunctions.

× You can just like, you know, makes it more interesting.

✓ You can just, you know, make it more interesting.

After modal 'can' the base form 'make' must be used, not 'makes'. The phrase 'you know' is filler and should be offset with commas; keep the verb in base form. Remove unnecessary 'just like' duplication. Suggestion: Use base verb after modal verbs and minimize filler words.