Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответы слишком расплывчатые и содержат повторы. Неясные фразы («the piece», «trail», «not taxing») мешают пониманию. Нужно четко начать с темы, затем привести 1–2 конкретных деталей (например, что именно нравится: пейзажи, люди, архитектура), использовать связки (because, so, for example) и избегать повторений. Оставляйте не больше 3–4 предложений и используйте более точную лексику (view, scenery, relaxing, interesting).

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I love the changing scenery. For example, I enjoy watching green fields and old houses pass by, which I find calming and interesting. Sometimes I try to spot different types of trees or buildings, so the journey feels less boring.

제안: Ответы содержат много повторов и неструктурированы. Фразы типа «every hour, every moment» и «do or make photos» звучат неестественно. Нужно дать прямое вступление (Yes, I do / No, I don't), затем одну конкретную причину и пример (when I travel on holiday, when the light is good). Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и уточняющую лексику (take photos, record videos, capture moments).

예시: Yes, I often take photos or make short videos of the view because the light and colours can be very beautiful. For example, on road trips I usually stop to record a sunset or an interesting building so I can remember the moment later.

제안: Ответ неопределённый и содержит неточные выражения («the piece»). Лучше дать чёткий выбор в начале (I prefer the mountains / I prefer the sea / I like both), затем пояснить причину и привести конкретный пример активности (hiking, swimming, photography). Используйте связки (because, however, for example) и избегайте колебаний в речи.

예시: I like both, but if I had to choose I would prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, I often go for long walks on mountain trails and take photos of wildflowers and views, which helps me relax and exercise.

× Yes, I do 'cause it's my favorite action in the car, what I love to do.

✓ Yes, I do, because looking out the window is my favorite thing to do in the car.

The student used 'action' which is unnatural; 'look' should be a noun phrase 'looking out the window' which uses the -ing form to describe an activity. Use 'because' instead of colloquial ' 'cause' and reorder for clarity. Suggestion: use verb+ -ing to name activities (e.g., 'looking out the window').

× It's really fantastic.

✓ It is really fantastic.

Replace contraction 'It's' with 'It is' optionally for formality; no grammatical error except style. Keep adjective 'fantastic' and adverb 'really' correctly placed before adjective.

× The piece is very wonderful and I really like it.

✓ The scenery is wonderful, and I really like it.

'The piece' is incorrect word choice; 'scenery' fits the context. Use a comma before conjunction joining independent clauses. 'Very wonderful' is redundant; 'wonderful' alone suffices.

× It's so gorgeous and by bus or by car, it's really interesting to trail.

✓ It is so gorgeous, and whether by bus or by car, it is really interesting to travel.

'To trail' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'to travel'. Use 'whether by bus or by car' for contrast. Keep adverb placement before adjective or verb as appropriate.

× It is not taxing.

✓ It is not tiring.

'Taxing' is formal and less natural in this context; 'tiring' better expresses lack of fatigue. Both are adjectives but choose the more idiomatic one.

× Yes, of course, every hour, every moment I do and make video 'cause it's really fantastic view, it's really exciting and when you listen to music and do or make photos, take photos, it's really good.

✓ Yes, of course, I take photos and make videos all the time because the view is fantastic; it is very exciting, and when you listen to music and take photos it feels great.

Use 'take photos' and 'make videos' idiomatically. Use progressive '-ing' where naming activities ('taking photos') and avoid mixing 'do or make photos'. Place adjectives correctly ('fantastic view' -> 'the view is fantastic'). Use conjunctions and punctuation to connect clauses clearly.

× I really love them both and I can't choose between them because the piece, the view of them is very fantastic and exciting and I really love to swim in the sea and go for a walk in the mountains and take photos.

✓ I really love both, and I can't choose between them because their views are fantastic and exciting. I love swimming in the sea, going for walks in the mountains, and taking photos.

Use 'both' without 'them' after 'love'. 'The piece, the view of them' is ungrammatical; use 'their views' or 'the views'. Use parallel gerund forms for listing activities ('swimming', 'going', 'taking').

× So I will prefer mountains more or see it's I don't know.

✓ So I would prefer the mountains more, or I'm not sure.

Use 'would prefer' for a preference statement and 'the mountains' with definite article. 'See it's I don't know' is incoherent; replace with 'or I'm not sure' to express uncertainty. Maintain modal usage for polite preference.