Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and answers the question, but there are issues with hesitations, repetition ("the the the"), and wordiness. To improve, give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (well, like, um), and use one or two concise supporting details linked logically (use linking words such as "because" or "so"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. If I have a window seat on a bus or in a car, I usually look out at the scenery because it helps me relax and enjoy the journey. For instance, I often watch the changing landscapes and small towns pass by, which makes long trips more interesting.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitation and unnecessary personal comments about followers and "photography skills" which can sound boastful and vague. Make the response concise: state whether you take photos, give a brief specific reason and one example. Avoid fillers (well, um, uh) and keep the structure: topic sentence + reason + short example.

예시: Yes, sometimes I take photos of interesting scenery from the car window because I want to remember the view or share it with friends. For example, last month I photographed a colorful sunset over a river and later posted it on social media.

제안: You answered the question and gave a personal reason, which is good, but the response has hesitations, grammatical slips, repetition, and an incomplete final thought. Make the opening direct ("I prefer the mountains."), give one clear reason with a linking word ("because"), and finish with a concise concluding sentence describing the feeling. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in a valley and feel a strong emotional connection to that landscape. The calm atmosphere and fresh air make me feel peaceful and relaxed whenever I visit.

× I would definitely enjoy the the the beautiful scenes outside the window because it just relaxes me.

✓ I would definitely enjoy the beautiful scenery outside the window because it just relaxes me.

The sentence repeats the definite article 'the' and uses 'scenes' which is correct but 'scenery' is more natural and uncountable here. Remove the duplicate articles and use the uncountable noun 'scenery' to sound natural. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it just relaxes me' is correct because 'scenery' is singular/unconstructable. Suggestion: remove repeated words and prefer 'scenery' for overall view.

× if I'm going on a trip and I am like sitting at the window seat on a bus or on a car, I would definitely enjoy the the the beautiful scenes outside the window because it just relaxes me.

✓ If I'm going on a trip and I'm sitting in the window seat on a bus or in a car, I would definitely enjoy the beautiful scenery outside the window because it just relaxes me.

Use 'sitting in' for seats and 'in a car' rather than 'on a car'. The original used incorrect preposition 'on' for 'car' and awkward phrase 'window seat on a bus or on a car'. Also remove filler 'like' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct prepositions 'in the window seat', 'in a car'.

× if I'm going on a trip and I am like sitting at the window seat on a bus or on a car, I would definitely enjoy the the the beautiful scenes outside the window because it just relaxes me.

✓ If I'm going on a trip and I'm sitting in the window seat on a bus or in a car, I would definitely enjoy the beautiful scenery outside the window because it just relaxes me.

Preposition 'at' is incorrect for 'window seat' — use 'in the window seat'. Also use 'on a bus' is acceptable but parallel structure prefers 'in a car'. 'On a car' is incorrect. Maintain parallel prepositions: 'on a bus' and 'in a car' or better both 'in'. Remove fillers.

× Well, if I find something beautiful, I would definitely take pictures.

✓ Well, if I find something beautiful, I will definitely take pictures.

In a real conditional referring to a likely future action, use 'will' in the main clause rather than 'would'. 'Would' is used in unreal or hypothetical conditional sentences. Suggestion: use 'If I find..., I will...' for real possibilities.

× the reason I take pictures is that I share them with my, uh, Instagram followers and they really appreciate my photography skills, Uh.

✓ The reason I take pictures is that I share them with my Instagram followers and they really appreciate my photography skills.

Remove filler 'uh' and ensure capitalization at sentence start. Pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'pictures' — no change needed — but punctuation and fillers disrupt clarity. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use proper sentence capitalization and punctuation.

× Will I like both the mountains and the sea?

✓ I like both the mountains and the sea.

The original sentence starts with 'Will I like...' which is an incorrect question form here. The speaker likely intends a statement or a rhetorical question 'I like both...' or 'Do I like both...?'. Use 'I like both...' as a clear affirmative response. Suggestion: use the declarative form when answering a preference.

× I have a deep connection with a mountain since my childhood and that's why I I really love mountains It makes me feel.

✓ I have had a deep connection with the mountains since my childhood, and that's why I really love mountains; they make me feel [complete/comfortable/at home].

Use plural 'mountains' or the definite 'the mountains' to refer generally to mountain environments. Also tense: 'have had' expresses continuing connection from past to present. 'Since my childhood' requires present perfect. Subject-verb agreement: 'mountains' is plural so use 'they make me feel' rather than 'it makes me feel'. Also remove duplicate 'I' and add ending to complete the thought. Suggestion: use present perfect with 'since' and match plural subjects with plural verbs.