Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然并直接切题，先用一句主题句回答“看”还是“不看”，然后说明原因并给具体例子。避免使用不准确或奇怪的表达（如“serious carelessness”），并注意时态和小句连接词，例如 because、so、but 等的衔接更清晰。可以把句子控制在最多五句内，使用更地道的短语如 “on short journeys”/“on long trips”。

예시: I usually look out of the window on short journeys because I enjoy the passing scenery. However, on long trips I often fall asleep or rest, so I don't watch much. For example, on a 30-minute bus ride I like to watch the streets and houses, but on a three-hour coach journey I mostly sleep.

제안: 需要更准确和自然的表达，并注意动词时态和句子连贯。先给出明确回答（yes/no/often/rarely），然后解释原因并给具体情境。修正语法错误（例如 “took”→“take”，“when we meet the traffic light”→“when we stop at traffic lights”），避免重复和矛盾句。

예시: I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window, but only when the car stops. For example, I usually take pictures at traffic lights or when we park, because it's hard to get a clear shot while the car is moving.

제안: 回答应先表明偏好（mountains/sea/both），然后简明给出一到两个具体原因和例子。避免语法错误与生硬表达（如 “their both”→“both of them”/“I am a big fan of both”），使用自然短语（e.g. “feel peaceful”，“lift my spirits”）。最后给出明确结论。

예시: I like both the mountains and the sea, but if I had to choose I'd prefer the mountains. The sea makes me feel calm and relaxed when I stand by the shore, while hiking in the mountains lifts my spirits and gives me a sense of achievement. For instance, reaching a mountain summit after a long climb is very rewarding.

× Well, it depends on the situations because I have a serious carelessness.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation because I am quite careless.

句子结构和词搭配不自然。“the situations”在此处应为泛指的“situation”。“I have a serious carelessness”用法不正确，英语中通常说“I am careless”或“I have poor attention/ I am very careless”。建议用简单形容词+系动词表达性格特征。

× So if it's a short distance I may watch outside for the sightseeing, but if it's a long distance I may have to sleep.

✓ So if it's a short distance I may look out at the scenery, but if it's a long distance I may have to sleep.

“watch outside for the sightseeing”搭配错误，sightseeing通常作名词活动，用look out at the scenery更自然。动词时态使用may表可能性合适，但动词搭配需调整。建议用固定搭配“look out at the scenery/ look at the view”。

× Well, generally I can do it, but I usually took photo when we meet the traffic light instead if the car is moving.

✓ Well, generally I can do it, but I usually take photos when we meet a traffic light, rather than when the car is moving.

时态和动词形式错误：句中应使用一般现在时“take photos”表示习惯动作，而不是过去式“took”。“meet the traffic light”搭配不当，常说“meet a traffic light”或“reach a traffic light”。使用连词“rather than”更符合比较两种情况。注意名词复数forms：photos。

× I don't I can't catch the best view of outside.

✓ I can't catch the best view from outside.

句子有重复“don't I can't”，应删除不正确的部分。介词使用也需调整，常说“catch the best view from outside”或“catch the best view out the window”。建议保持句子简洁，避免双重否定和冗余。

× Well I am a big fan of their both.

✓ Well, I am a big fan of both of them.

“their both”用法错误，应使用“both of them”或“both”来表示两者皆喜爱。语法上需要宾格代词“them”。建议用固定短语“a big fan of both”或“a big fan of both of them”。

× When I stand nearby the sea I always feel a sense of peaceful and when I am climbing the mountains I often raise my spirits.

✓ When I stand by the sea I always feel peaceful, and when I climb mountains I often feel uplifted.

词性和搭配错误：“a sense of peaceful”不正确，应为形容词“feel peaceful”或名词短语“a sense of peace”。“climbing the mountains”可简化为“climb mountains”。“raise my spirits”语义可用“feel uplifted”或“my spirits are lifted”。建议使用常见表达“feel peaceful”“feel uplifted”。

× But I think the best is pick the top of the mountain.

✓ But I think the best is to pick the top of the mountain.

不定式结构缺失“to”。句子更自然的表达是“the best is to pick the top of the mountain”或更地道为“I prefer the top of a mountain”。建议使用不定式做表语或改为更自然的偏好表达。