Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp nhỏ và độ tự nhiên của câu trả lời; tránh lỗi lặp từ và các lỗi đánh máy. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể liên kết bằng từ nối (ví dụ: because, for example). Điều chỉnh số lượng câu không vượt quá 5 câu và tránh từ ngữ không chính xác như “an an unconcerned habit”.

예시: I usually look out of the car window when travelling because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. For example, I especially like snowy or ice-covered landscapes, as they relax me and make the journey more interesting.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (động từ và danh từ số nhiều), và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn. Thêm liên kết logic ngắn (e.g., so, therefore) và cụ thể hoá ví dụ (nêu nơi hoặc thời điểm chụp). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và tự nhiên.

예시: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I like capturing interesting landscapes to remind myself of the trip. For example, I usually photograph mountains or coastal views at sunrise when the light is especially beautiful.

제안: Cần sửa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không đúng (ví dụ: “piece of atmosphere”, “fly coastal areas”). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer the mountains) rồi giải thích lý do bằng các lý lẽ cụ thể và liên kết (for example, because). Tránh thêm thông tin mơ hồ; nếu muốn nói về sợ biển, hãy dùng từ đúng như “afraid of the sea” hoặc “avoid coastal areas” và giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere, which help me relax. I tend to avoid coastal areas because I feel uneasy around large bodies of water.

× Looking out the window is almost an an unconcerned habit for me.

✓ Looking out the window is almost an unconcerned habit for me.

The sentence contains a doubled article 'an an'. Remove the duplicate so it reads 'an unconcerned habit'. Also, 'unconcerned' may not convey intended meaning; consider 'unthinking' or 'automatic' if you mean habitual and not deliberate.

× I always enjoy watching beautiful scenery, especially snowy or ice covered landscape because they relax me and make the journey more interesting.

✓ I always enjoy watching beautiful scenery, especially snowy or ice-covered landscapes, because they relax me and make the journey more interesting.

Use a hyphen for compound adjectives 'ice-covered' and plural 'landscapes' to match 'scenery' in general. Add a comma before 'because' for clarity. 'They' correctly refers to 'scenery/landscapes' so plural is needed.

× Yes, I often take photo of scenery outside the car window because I like to capturing interesting landscape and remind myself of the trip.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like to capture interesting landscapes and remind myself of the trip.

Use plural 'photos' and include the definite article 'the' for 'scenery' when specific. Use base verb 'capture' after 'like to' (not 'capturing'). Use plural 'landscapes' to match general reference.

× For example, I always photograph mountain or coastal view when they look especially beautiful.

✓ For example, I always photograph mountains or coastal views when they look especially beautiful.

Pluralize 'mountain' and 'coastal view' to 'mountains' and 'coastal views' to talk about such scenes in general. 'They' then correctly refers to these plural nouns.

× I prefer the mountain because I enjoy the fresh air, the piece of atmosphere and the scenic views which help me feel relaxed and feel calm.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air, the peace of the atmosphere and the scenic views which help me feel relaxed and calm.

Use plural 'mountains' to indicate preference in general. 'Piece of atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'peace of the atmosphere' or better 'peaceful atmosphere'. Remove redundant 'feel' before 'calm'.

× And I tend to avoid going near by the sea because I fly coastal areas.

✓ And I tend to avoid going near the sea because I fear coastal areas.

'Near by' should be 'near' (or 'nearby' as an adjective). 'I fly' is incorrect; likely intended 'I fear' or 'I avoid' — corrected to 'fear'. Also 'coastal areas' is fine but 'fear coastal areas' matches intended meaning.