Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and pronouns, and finish the thought. Use one or two supporting details connected with linking words and avoid trailing fragments.

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. It relaxes me and helps clear my mind because I can see trees, fields and distant hills. Also, looking outside makes the journey more enjoyable and helps me notice small changes in the landscape.

제안: Make your answer grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a direct response, then give one clear reason why you take photos and a short example. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car. I do this to preserve memories, especially when I spot beautiful places like coastal views or mountain peaks. For example, I recently photographed a sunset over the sea and looked at it later to remember the trip.

제안: Answer directly naming your preference, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Use accurate nouns and verbs and avoid vague fillers. Keep to two or three short sentences.

예시: I prefer the sea to the mountains. I like swimming and relaxing on the beach, and the seaside is great for family picnics and playing games together.

× I think by looking out the window it help me to realize my mind because I can get closer to nature and it help me to enjoy the view.

✓ I think that looking out of the window helps me to clear my mind because I can get closer to nature and it helps me to enjoy the view.

Use of 'by looking' is acceptable but 'that looking' or simply 'looking' is more natural; main errors are subject-verb agreement with 'help' (singular subject 'it' or 'looking' requires 'helps') and 'realize my mind' is incorrect collocation — 'clear my mind' is correct. Also use 'out of the window' or 'out the window' consistently. Suggestion: use 'looking' as the gerund subject and ensure verbs agree: 'looking ... helps'.

× Other than that it also enhance my.

✓ Other than that, it also enhances me.

Missing object and incorrect verb form: 'it' (singular) requires 'enhances' (adds -s). However 'enhances me' is odd; better to specify what is enhanced (e.g., 'it also enhances my mood'). Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and include a clear object.

× Yes, I do thank you for those help me to keep my memorable experience experience.

✓ Yes, I do. Those photos help me to keep my memorable experiences.

Awkward phrasing and redundancy: 'thank you for those' is unclear; use full sentence 'Yes, I do.' Then correct noun form 'photos' and plural 'experiences'. No past tense required; keep present simple 'help' because it's a habitual ability. Suggestion: use clear subject and verb and avoid repeated words.

× So after I back home, I can I'm able to look at it and it can help me to treat my wait.

✓ So after I get back home, I am able to look at them and they can help me to relive the moments.

Multiple structural errors: missing verb 'get' after 'I', incorrect contraction 'I can I'm able' is redundant, pronoun reference 'it' unclear (plural 'photos' -> 'them'), and 'treat my wait' is incorrect phrase — likely intended 'relive/recall my memories'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'get back', avoid redundant modals, match pronouns to nouns, and use correct collocation 'relive the moments'.

× For me, I do prefer this thing because you are able to swim at that.

✓ For me, I prefer the sea because you are able to swim there.

Unnatural 'I do prefer this thing' — use 'I prefer the sea'. Use present simple 'prefer' (habitual). Preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'swim' here; use 'there'. Suggestion: name the preference clearly and use 'there' for location.

× Other than that, you can also spend your time with your family while picnic at the seaside.

✓ You can also spend time with your family while having a picnic at the seaside.

Incorrect verb form 'picnic' used as verb without correct structure; use 'having a picnic' or 'picnicking'. Preposition placement OK. Suggestion: use gerund phrase 'having a picnic' or 'picnicking' to describe the activity.

× Other than MMM.

✓ (No correction possible: unclear fragment.)

This fragment 'Other than MMM.' is incomplete and unintelligible. It lacks a verb and clear meaning. Suggestion: clarify intended meaning or remove the fragment; provide a full sentence such as 'Other than that, I don't have any more preferences.'