Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Reduce repetition (e.g., 'very different and very wonderful').

예시: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel. For example, I enjoy watching the landscape change from dense urban streets to quieter suburbs, which always feels refreshing.

제안: Correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Use a clear structure: topic sentence, one reason, and a linking word. Fix verb forms and remove repeated phrases like 'all of the all of the'.

예시: Yes, I usually take photos with my phone or a small camera because I like to capture interesting views. For instance, I often photograph colourful sunsets or unusual buildings so I can remember them later.

제안: Make the answer more natural and focused. Start with a direct preference, give one clear reason with a linking word, and avoid irrelevant information unless it supports the reason. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'go to the beach').

예시: I prefer the sea because being on a wide beach helps me relax. Also, I love the colour blue, so the sea always lifts my mood.

× Absolutely yes, because when I'm sitting in the car or on the train, I can observe the scenery change from the urban city to the newer city. It is very different and very wonderful.

✓ Absolutely. When I'm sitting in a car or on a train, I can observe the scenery change from the urban area to newer areas; it is very different and wonderful.

Multiple small issues: article use and word choice. 'Absolutely yes' is awkward — use 'Absolutely.' 'the car' and 'the train' suggest specific vehicles; use 'a car' and 'a train' for general statements (Grammar problem type ID:22 Article errors). 'urban city' is redundant; 'urban area' is better (12? actually lexical but fits as Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, ID:13). 'the newer city' is unclear; 'newer areas' or 'newer parts of the city' is clearer. Suggestions: use correct articles for general statements, avoid redundant adjective+noun pairs, and choose clear nouns (area/parts) for contrast. Keep tense present continuous for current habitual action (no tense change needed).

× Sure, I always to bring my cellphone or my small camera to record all of the all of the beautiful scenery which I want to memorize in my mind.

✓ Sure, I always bring my cellphone or my small camera to record all of the beautiful scenery that I want to remember.

Contains an incorrect verb form and extra words. 'always to bring' is wrong; use simple present 'always bring' for habitual action (Grammar problem type ID:6 Present tense issue). Duplicate phrase 'all of the all of the' is redundant (Grammar problem type ID:26 Sentence structure errors). 'which I want to memorize in my mind' is wordy and slightly incorrect: use 'that I want to remember' (Grammar problem type ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs / wording). Suggestions: use simple present for habits, remove duplicate words, and prefer 'remember' over 'memorize in my mind' for natural speech.

× To be honest, I am a big fan of going to the beach because the huge beach will make me relax and calm down.

✓ To be honest, I am a big fan of going to the beach because the wide beach helps me relax and calm down.

Word choice and modal/future issue. 'the huge beach will make me relax' uses 'will' implying future; a general preference should use present simple 'helps me relax' (Grammar problem type ID:7 Future tense issue and ID:6 Present tense issue). 'Huge' is acceptable but 'wide' or 'large' is more natural with 'beach'; also 'make me relax' is less natural than 'help me relax' (Grammar problem type ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual feelings and choose verbs like 'help' for causation.

× Also I want to mention my favorite color is blue so when I go to beach I will feel so happy.

✓ Also, I want to mention my favorite color is blue, so when I go to the beach I feel very happy.

Article and tense issues. Missing article before 'beach' — use 'the beach' (Grammar problem type ID:22 Article errors). 'I will feel so happy' uses future 'will' but this is a habitual reaction; use present simple 'I feel very happy' (Grammar problem type ID:7 Future tense issue). Also replace 'so happy' with 'very happy' for formality and clarity (Grammar problem type ID:13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestions: include articles with common nouns, use present simple for habitual reactions, and choose precise adverbs.