Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับเรื่องโครงสร้างประโยคและไวยากรณ์ให้ชัดเจน ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อสั้น ๆ แล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ อย่าใช้คำฟุ่มเฟือย และใช้คำกริยาที่ถูกต้อง (เช่น "riding" แทน "crawling") นอกจากนี้จำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค และหลีกเลี่ยงความซ้ำซ้อน

예시: I sometimes look out of the window when I travel, but usually I prefer to sleep. For long journeys I find a short nap helps me feel refreshed. However, if the view is interesting I will stay awake to enjoy it.

제안: แก้ปัญหาความชัดเจนและความสอดคล้องของประโยค อธิบายสาเหตุอย่างเป็นระบบใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" และกล่าวผลลัพธ์ที่ชัดเจน ฝึกใช้คำศัพท์ที่เกี่ยวข้อง (e.g. "blurry", "reflection", "movement") และจำกัดเป็น 2–3 ประโยค

예시: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the car window, but they often turn out blurry because the car is moving. Also, sunlight and reflections on the glass can spoil the picture, so I usually wait until we stop to take better photos.

제안: ปรับคำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ให้เป็นธรรมชาติเพิ่มเหตุผลที่ชัดเจนและเฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผลกับความชอบ เช่น "because" หรือ "so" และอธิบายกิจกรรมที่ชอบอย่างกระชับ (ไม่เกิน 3 ประโยค)

예시: I prefer the sea because Thailand has many beautiful beaches and I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the sand. The coastal atmosphere feels peaceful, and I like activities like snorkeling and watching sunsets.

× Sometimes I do, but normally when I'm crawling on a bus or car I always sleep because I thought I'd take a nap on the vehicles is the best.

✓ Sometimes I do, but normally when I'm travelling by bus or car I always sleep because I think taking a nap on the vehicle is best.

Several tense and word-choice errors: 'crawling' is incorrect contextually; use 'travelling'. The clause 'I thought I'd take a nap' mixes past with present habit; use present simple 'I think' to match habitual action. 'on the vehicles' is incorrect article/number and phrasing; use 'on the vehicle' or simply omit 'the'. Also 'is the best' is unnecessary; 'is best' is more natural. Suggestion: match tense for habitual actions (use present simple), choose correct verbs for meaning, and use singular/uncountable nouns appropriately.

× Yes, I do, but I thought that while I'm taking photos of the scenery outside the car window, it's a little bit of it.

✓ Yes, I do, but I think that while I'm taking photos of the scenery outside the car window, there is only a little of it.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect existential expression: 'thought' (past) conflicts with ongoing habit—use 'think'. 'it's a little bit of it' is ungrammatical for saying only a small amount appears; use 'there is only a little of it' or 'only a little is visible'. Also consider using 'a little' or 'a bit' for quantity. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual statements and use 'there is' or 'only a little is visible' for clarity.

× It is a little bit blur because like while traveling, it's sun.

✓ It is a little bit blurry because while traveling, it's sunny.

Wrong word forms and awkward phrasing: 'blur' is a noun/adjective root; the correct adjective is 'blurry'. 'it's sun' is incorrect; the adjective form 'sunny' describes weather or light conditions. Also remove filler 'like'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms (blurry, sunny) and concise phrasing: 'It's a little blurry because it's sunny while traveling.'

× I prefer the sea because I think in Thailand the sea is the most popular places for the tourism that traveling to Thailand and I like to play a sea water and a sand.

✓ I prefer the sea because I think the sea is the most popular place for tourists in Thailand, and I like playing in the seawater and on the sand.

Multiple issues: 'the most popular places' conflicts with singular 'the sea'—use 'place' or make plural consistently. 'for the tourism that traveling to Thailand' is ungrammatical; use 'for tourists in Thailand' or 'for tourism in Thailand'. 'play a sea water and a sand' uses incorrect articles and verbs—use 'playing in the seawater and on the sand'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct quantifiers and prepositions: 'place for tourists', 'playing in the seawater'.

× Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?

✓ Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?

This sentence is grammatically correct as written. The verb form 'do you look' correctly matches the second person subject. No change needed.