Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement, word order).

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus, car or train. For example, I enjoy watching changes in the weather and how the landscape shifts from city streets to fields, because it helps me relax and notice details I would miss otherwise.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then provide one or two specific examples. Remove repeated words and correct collocations (e.g., ‘take photos of the scenery’, ‘sunrise and sunset’). Use a linking phrase to add detail.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery when I travel. For instance, I frequently photograph sunrises and sunsets because the colors are beautiful, and I like to keep those moments as memories.

제안: Answer directly and expand with clear, coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and incorrect grammar (e.g., 'I am afraid of animals and insects'). Provide one concise comparison and a specific reason.

예시: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy the beach atmosphere, such as the sound of waves and warm sunlight. Also, I’m not comfortable with insects and wildlife in the mountains, so the seaside feels more relaxing for me.

× It is the most interesting experience when you when traveling by car or by bus and by train is the scenery outside of the door with the weather.

✓ It is most interesting to look at the scenery outside when traveling by car, bus, or train, especially with changing weather.

Original sentence has redundant words ('when' twice), awkward phrasing ('the scenery outside of the door'), and wrong word order. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggest using an infinitive phrase 'to look at' and a clearer list 'car, bus, or train', and move the modifier 'especially with changing weather' to the end for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I do capture every moment that I feel I feel interesting, especially the scenery.

✓ I do capture every moment that I find interesting, especially the scenery.

The phrase 'I feel I feel interesting' is ungrammatical and uses the wrong verb; 'find' is the correct verb to describe perceiving something as interesting. This falls under article/errors of verb choice but best matched to article errors (ID 22) because of incorrect expression; correction replaces the redundant 'I feel' and fixes verb usage. Suggest using 'I find interesting' or simply 'that I find interesting'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I usually take photo of the sunset and sunrise of the nature outside the outside of the door.

✓ I usually take photos of the sunrise and sunset in nature outside the window.

Problems include missing plural marker on 'photo' and incorrect prepositional phrases 'of the nature' and 'outside of the door'. This fits incorrect use of articles/number and prepositions (ID 22 and 11); primary correction addresses article/number: use plural 'photos', and use 'in nature' and 'outside the window' for natural English. Suggest: 'take photos of the sunrise and sunset in nature outside the window.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I would say that I'm a sea person because I love the atmosphere at the beach with water, sand and sunny light.

✓ I would say that I'm a sea person because I love the atmosphere at the beach, with water, sand, and sunlight.

Use of 'sunny light' is nonstandard; 'sunlight' is the correct noun. This is a present tense/word choice issue (ID 6). Also added commas for clarity and an Oxford-style list. Suggest substitute 'sunlight' and ensure parallel items 'water, sand, and sunlight.' Grammar problem type ID: 6

× The jungle. I have a lot of afraid of the animal, the insect, so I love being.

✓ I am afraid of jungle animals and insects, so I prefer the beach.

Original contains sentence fragments ('The jungle.'), incorrect phrase 'I have a lot of afraid of', incorrect articles 'the animal, the insect', and incomplete clause 'so I love being.' These are pronoun/article and sentence structure errors (IDs 12 and 26). Correction provides a single coherent sentence: 'I am afraid of jungle animals and insects, so I prefer the beach.' Suggest using 'afraid of' with the verb 'to be' and plural nouns without unnecessary definite articles, and finish the comparative clause clearly.