Typing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは明確ですが、表現が自然ではなく冗長です。まず主張を明確なトピック文で述べ（I prefer typing.）、その後に1〜2文で具体的な理由（speed, convenience, editing）を簡潔に述べてください。口語表現の過度な使用（"Oh", "more way faster"）を避け、正しい比較表現（"much faster"や"faster than handwriting"）を使いましょう。

예시: I prefer typing. It's much faster than handwriting and makes editing and organizing notes easier, especially when I need to revise quickly.

제안: 答えは具体的で適切ですが、一部語順と語選びに改善の余地があります。冗長な表現（"a lot of desk desktop"）を避け、理由を論理的に繋げるために接続詞を使ってください（"so"、"because"）。日常性や頻度を明確にする語（"usually", "mostly"）の使い方は良いです。

예시: I usually use a laptop because I need to take it to school. It's more convenient for doing assignments and attending online classes, so I rarely use my desktop.

제안: 良いエピソードですが、時制と表現が混在しています（過去と現在進行）。まず過去に学んだ時点を述べ（I learned to type when I was six.）、続けてどのように練習したかを説明し、現在の結果（I'm still improving）を1文で述べると自然です。口語の曖昧表現（"like"）は控えめに。

예시: I learned to type when I was six after my mother gave me a laptop. I practised every day as a child, and I'm still improving my speed and accuracy.

제안: 回答が長くて焦点が曖昧です。質問は「どのように改善しているか」を尋ねているので、具体的な方法（練習の頻度、使う教材、練習法）を中心に述べてください。繰り返し（重複した情報）や無関係な詳細（ポータブルである点の繰り返し）は削除し、接続詞で文を整理しましょう。

예시: I improve my typing by practising for 20–30 minutes daily using online typing exercises and timed tests. I also focus on accuracy first, then gradually increase my speed.

× Oh I definitely prefer typing because I like using computer and it's more way faster than handwriting.

✓ Oh, I definitely prefer typing because I like using computers and it's much faster than handwriting.

'using computer' is missing an article or should be plural; 'computers' or 'a computer'. 'more way faster' is ungrammatical; use 'much faster' or 'way faster'. Also add comma after 'Oh' for natural pacing.

× I have both a lot of desk desktop and a laptop, but I mostly use a laptop 'cause I have to take it to school for my studies.

✓ I have both a desktop and a laptop, but I mostly use the laptop because I have to take it to school for my studies.

'a lot of desk desktop' is incorrect word order and 'desktop' should be singular 'a desktop'. Use 'the laptop' when referring back to a specific device. Avoid contraction ' 'cause' in formal speech.

× It's more convenient for doing assignments and attending online class.

✓ It's more convenient for doing assignments and attending online classes.

'attending online class' requires plural 'classes' or an article 'an online class' depending on meaning. 'assignments' plural is fine; ensure parallel structure.

× That's a good question, I used to use keyboard when I was like 6 years old and my mom gave me a laptop and I practiced every day and I'm getting better now.

✓ That's a good question. I started using a keyboard when I was about six years old because my mom gave me a laptop, and I practiced every day, so I'm getting better now.

'used to use keyboard' is awkward; use 'started using a keyboard' or 'used a keyboard'. 'use keyboard' needs article 'a keyboard'. Add conjunctions and punctuation to separate ideas and clarify cause-effect. 'like 6 years old' -> 'about six years old'.

× As I said before, I got a laptop and desktop computer from my parents when I was six years old and I practice every day and it's very beneficial for me and it's the laptop is very portable and it's useful.

✓ As I said before, I got a laptop and a desktop computer from my parents when I was six years old, and I have practiced every day, which has been very beneficial for me. The laptop is very portable and useful.

Tense consistency: 'I practice every day' should be 'I have practiced every day' to link past action to present benefit, or 'I practice every day' can be present but maintain consistency. Remove redundant 'it's' and correct article use 'a desktop computer'. Split into two sentences for clarity.