Typing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "handwriting feels more personal" instead of repeating "connection").

예시: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and helps me think more clearly. For example, when I take notes by hand I remember ideas better, and the physical act of writing makes my thoughts flow more naturally.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add brief specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence. Reduce small grammar errors ("on a laptop keyboard" → "on a laptop") and avoid repeating "every day" unnecessarily.

예시: I type on a laptop every day because my school requires students to use laptops for lessons. For instance, we regularly complete assignments and write literature essays on them, so I’m on my laptop for several hours daily.

제안: Open with a clear time phrase, avoid repetition and filler, and use correct terminology ("touch typing" or "ten-finger typing"). Add a brief supporting detail about how you practiced and link it logically.

예시: I learned to type when I was in middle school. We had a computers class where we were taught touch typing, and I practiced for about 20 minutes every day until I became accurate and faster.

제안: Be consistent and clear: state the main method first, avoid contradictory statements, eliminate hesitations, and give a specific routine with linking words. Quantify practice time and explain its effect on your speed/accuracy.

예시: I improve my typing by practicing for about one hour most days. Because my school uses laptops a lot, I type during lessons and then do extra practice at home using online typing exercises to increase my speed and reduce errors.

× I type on laptop keyboard every day because in our school laptops are required every day and we do our assignments there and sometimes we need to write an essay about something in literature so we use it every day.

✓ I type on a laptop keyboard every day because at our school laptops are required and we do our assignments there. Sometimes we need to write an essay about something in literature, so we use them every day.

The sentence misses the indefinite article 'a' before 'laptop keyboard' and uses 'it' to refer to 'laptops' (plural). Use 'a laptop keyboard' for a singular noun and 'them' to refer back to the plural 'laptops'. Also 'in our school' is more naturally 'at our school' in this context, and splitting the long sentence into two improves clarity. Suggestions: add appropriate articles ('a'), ensure pronoun agreement with plural nouns ('them'), and prefer 'at' for locations like schools.

× I learned how to type on the keyboard when I was in a middle school, so we had a lecture about computer computer science and we needed to learn how to type in 10A finger and I practiced it so much at that time, so I eventually learned it.

✓ I learned how to type on the keyboard when I was in middle school, because we had a computer science class and we needed to learn touch typing with all ten fingers. I practiced a lot at that time, so I eventually learned it.

'In a middle school' is not idiomatic; use 'in middle school' (no article) when speaking generally. 'A lecture about computer computer science' is awkward; 'computer science class' is more natural. 'Type in 10A finger' is incorrect phrasing; the intended idea is 'touch typing with all ten fingers.' 'Practiced it so much' is informal; 'practiced a lot' is clearer. Suggestions: drop unnecessary articles for general education levels, use standard terms ('computer science class', 'touch typing'), and rephrase awkward fragments.

× I prefer handwriting because I can express myself more clearly. With handwriting, I can just, I feel like the the I feel like there's a connection between. When I'm handwriting, I feel like there is a connection between me and the paper. But with typing, I just don't feel as much as emotions as as typing.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I can express myself more clearly. With handwriting, I feel like there is a connection between me and the paper. But with typing, I don't feel as much emotion.

The original contains repetition ('the the I feel like'), an unnecessary fragment ('I can just,'), and incorrect comparative phrasing 'as much as emotions as as typing.' Use the uncountable noun 'emotion' rather than plural 'emotions' after 'as much.' Also remove redundancies and fragments for clarity. Suggestions: eliminate repeated words and fragments, use correct noun forms ('emotion'), and simplify comparisons ('don't feel as much emotion').

× I improve my typing, uh, by practicing every day because since our school requires, uh, computers and we use it regularly, umm, when I get home, I don't, uh, do much practice. I think it's, uh, enough. Practicing, uh, by one is 1 hour, so that's.

✓ I improve my typing by practicing every day because our school requires computers and we use them regularly. When I get home, I don't practice much. I think practicing for one hour is enough.

Errors include 'we use it' referring to 'computers' (plural) — should be 'them'; awkward phrasing 'do much practice' should be 'don't practice much'; and 'Practicing, uh, by one is 1 hour' is ungrammatical — intended meaning is 'practicing for one hour.' Remove filler words (uh, umm) and correct pronoun number and preposition use. Suggestions: use correct pronoun agreement ('them'), change 'do much practice' to 'practice much' (or 'don't practice much'), and use 'for' with durations ('for one hour').