Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (articles, plural/singular) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "coastal views", "mountain scenery", "green landscapes").

예시: I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph coastal views and mountain scenery because I like vibrant natural colours. Also, I take photos of historic buildings to capture interesting architecture.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear preference with reasons. Avoid vague statements and fillers. Use linking words (because, therefore, however) and give one or two specific examples of what you like in urban or rural views.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architecture and city lights. For instance, I like photographing busy streets and old buildings, as they often show interesting details and contrast.

제안: Give a clear comparison and reason for preferring foreign or domestic views. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "normalized". Use linking words (because, for example) and provide specific details about what interests you abroad versus at home.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different architecture and cultural scenes. For example, in Dubai I enjoy photographing modern skyscrapers and coastal areas, which are very different from the landscapes in my own country.

× Yes, I like to take a pictures of different places like, uh, when I visit to some country, I would like, I would like to see the views, the water views, sea views and uh, for the buildings, mountains.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different places, for example when I visit a country I like to see views such as waterfronts, sea views, buildings and mountains.

The phrase 'a pictures' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'pictures' — this is a singular/plural error. Also 'visit to some country' is incorrect: 'visit a country' uses correct verb-object structure. Use plural 'pictures' without 'a', and use 'a country' or 'the country' depending on context. Suggestion: remove the article before plural nouns and use 'visit a country' or 'visit countries'.

× So yeah, I like to take the pictures for a different views.

✓ So yeah, I like to take pictures of different views.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; use 'take pictures of' to indicate what the photos show. Also 'a different views' combines singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' to match plural 'views'. Suggestion: use 'take pictures of' and ensure articles match noun number.

× Yeah, I like to see, uh, the view of urban, urban areas like, uh, you know, many are some visiting to some places.

✓ Yes, I like to see urban areas, because many people visit them.

The phrase 'the view of urban, urban areas' is repetitive and awkward; simplify to 'urban areas'. 'Many are some visiting to some places' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'many people visit them'. This is an adjective/adverb and sentence structure issue — replace vague/incorrect words with clear nouns and correct word order. Suggestion: use 'many people visit them' for clarity.

× Everybody is like to see the urban areas.

✓ Everyone likes to see urban areas.

'Everybody is like to see' has incorrect verb form and structure. Use 'likes' with singular indefinite pronoun 'everyone' (subject-verb agreement) and the base verb 'to see' without 'to' after 'likes'. Suggestion: use 'Everyone likes to see...' or 'Most people like to see...'.

× So that is a good, uh, uh, use.

✓ So that is a good thing to do.

'Good use' is vague and the filler words make the sentence unclear. 'A good thing to do' conveys the intended meaning. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Suggestion: use clearer noun phrases like 'a good thing' or 'a useful activity'.

× Uh, in one country, I already see the views as, as as, as, as I, uh, normalized.

✓ In my own country I have already seen such views and they feel familiar to me.

'In one country' is unclear; 'my own country' fits question context. 'I already see' should be past participle 'have seen' for present relevance. 'Normalized' is incorrect for expressing familiarity. This sentence has singular/plural and tense problems; correct to 'have seen' and use 'they feel familiar'. Suggestion: use present perfect to show experience and express familiarity with 'familiar' rather than 'normalized'.

× So I like to visit some another country like Dubai.

✓ So I like to visit another country, such as Dubai.

'Some another country' is incorrect; use either 'some' or 'another' but not both. Also 'like Dubai' should be 'such as Dubai' or 'for example Dubai' when giving an example. Suggestion: use 'another country such as...' or 'some other country, for example...'.

× So I take the pictures of the buildings, roads, instruction and the views of there and the seas.

✓ I take pictures of the buildings, roads, streets and the views there, including the sea.

'The pictures of the buildings' can be simplified to 'pictures of buildings' unless a specific set is meant. 'Instruction' is likely a wrong word — perhaps 'infrastructure' or 'streets'; choose correct noun. 'The views of there' is awkward; use 'views there'. Article use is inconsistent: remove unnecessary 'the' before general nouns. Suggestion: use 'pictures of buildings, roads, and the sea views' and choose correct nouns (e.g. 'infrastructure' or 'streets').

× Yeah, I like it.

✓ Yes, I like it.

Use 'Yes' rather than colloquial 'Yeah' in formal exam responses. This is a style/tone issue within present tense; the tense itself is fine. Suggestion: use 'Yes' for clarity and formality.