Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid generic statements like “Photography is an art” unless you expand. Use linking words if you add details.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I especially like photographing mountains at sunrise because the light brings out rich colors and dramatic shadows.

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct and give a concrete reason with a linking word. Keep it to two to three sentences and avoid vague phrases.

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they show traditional life and open landscapes. For instance, in villages you can see people farming and local festivals, which tell you more about our culture.

제안: This answer is unclear and has several grammar and vocabulary errors. Give one clear preference and support it with specific, relevant details. Use correct nouns and simple linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid confusing or unrelated expressions.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I can easily access diverse landscapes. For example, in Punjab I enjoy photographing golden wheat fields during harvest, and in Jammu and Kashmir I like capturing the snow-capped mountains and rivers.

× Photography is an art and yes, I love to take pictures of mountains, beaches.

✓ Photography is an art, and yes, I love to take pictures of mountains and beaches.

Missing conjunction punctuation and coordinating conjunction use: the original omits the conjunction 'and' between 'mountains' and 'beaches' after a comma, which makes the list sound incomplete. Add 'and' to correctly join the two nouns in a compound list. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses for clarity.

× I think rural area is better than the urban one.

✓ I think rural areas are better than urban ones.

Singular/plural and subject-verb agreement: 'rural area' and 'the urban one' refer generally to types of places and should be plural to match general comparison. Using plural 'areas' requires plural verb 'are'. Also remove unnecessary definite article before 'urban' when used in plural generalization.

× In rural area, we get encounter with the culture of our country.

✓ In rural areas, we encounter the culture of our country.

Preposition and verb collocation: 'get encounter with' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'encounter' (no 'get'), and the preposition 'with' is not needed after 'encounter' when the object follows directly. Also use plural 'rural areas' for general statement and include comma after introductory phrase.

× I live in India and in India we have bunched up where wheat is the most important agriculture product and we call it Sony the cherry.

✓ I live in India, and in India we have densely populated areas where wheat is the most important agricultural product and we call it the 'golden harvest'.

Multiple issues: tense is present but phrasing and word choice are incorrect. 'Bunched up' is informal and unclear; 'densely populated areas' is a clearer present-tense description. 'Agriculture product' should be the adjective 'agricultural product'. The phrase 'we call it Sony the cherry' is nonsensical in English; replace with an idiomatic term such as 'the golden harvest' or a culturally accurate nickname. Ensure commas join independent clauses.

× So taking the photographs of Punjab is one of my favorite thing and when we go to Jammu, there are mountains in Kashmir.

✓ So taking photographs of Punjab is one of my favorite things, and when we go to Jammu, there are mountains in Kashmir.

Noun-number agreement and punctuation: 'one of my favorite thing' should be 'one of my favorite things' (plural 'things' after 'one of'). Remove 'the' before 'photographs' when speaking generally. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. The rest of the clause is acceptable though 'when we go to Jammu, there are mountains in Kashmir' could be made smoother by specifying 'near Jammu' if intended.