Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words, correct grammar, and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "scenes" instead of "singings" or "Hindu") and avoid unclear words. Keep answers within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photography, especially landscape and nature scenes. For example, I often photograph forests and mountains during sunrise because the soft light and varied angles create dramatic images. I also experiment with different perspectives to make each photo unique.

제안: Be decisive and avoid self-correction. Give a clear direct answer (urban or rural), then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Reduce fillers and repeat fewer words. Use precise adjectives and examples to explain why you prefer one over the other.

예시: I prefer rural views because the natural scenery is more peaceful and photogenic. For instance, I like photographing rolling hills and quiet villages where morning mist and golden light make the scenes look almost like a fairy tale.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and give concrete examples. Start with a direct statement, then give 1–2 specific places and reasons why they appeal to you. Avoid incorrect words like "sports" when you mean "spots" or place names; pronounce and name places clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best locations and seasons for photography. For example, Nathiagali has beautiful mountain ridges and misty mornings that create breathtaking skylines, and I enjoy capturing those scenes at sunrise when the light is most dramatic.

× I like to take pictures of uh, different views, uh, especially uh, the nature.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views, especially nature.

The definite article 'the' before 'nature' is unnecessary when talking about nature in general. Remove 'the' to make it a general noun. Also remove filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× I love to uh, try picture, uh, take picture of uh, different singings with different light and different angle type.

✓ I love trying to take pictures of different scenes with different lighting and angles.

Original sentence has poor word order, incorrect noun 'singings' and awkward phrases. Use the gerund 'trying' after 'love to' or rephrase as 'I love to try to take pictures'. Use 'scenes' instead of 'singings', 'lighting' for light, and plural 'angles'. This corrects sentence structure and word choice. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And I really enjoy Hindu.

✓ And I really enjoy Hindu culture.

'Hindu' is an adjective or can be a noun for a person; the sentence is incomplete. Specify 'Hindu culture' or 'Hindu traditions' to be grammatically correct and clear. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I umm, prefer both uh, areas view, but uh, personally I prefer the urban areas, the rural areas, sorry.

✓ I prefer both urban and rural views, but personally I prefer urban areas.

'Areas view' is incorrect word order and redundancy. Simplify to 'urban and rural views' and remove repetition. Clarifies contrast between both and personal preference. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Because in rural areas, the atmosphere is uh, natural and uh, uh, scenery, giving me breathtaking atmosphere and everything all look like a fairy tale story.

✓ Because in rural areas the atmosphere and scenery are natural and breathtaking, and everything looks like a fairy tale.

Use plural verb agreement 'are' for 'atmosphere and scenery'. Remove extra 'the' before 'atmosphere' and avoid repeating 'atmosphere'. Use 'looks' not 'all look', and 'a fairy tale' rather than 'a fairy tale story' which is redundant. Grammar problem type ID:17

× Personally, I prefer the views of my own country, uh, because I am used to it.

✓ Personally, I prefer the views in my own country because I am used to them.

'Views' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them', not 'it'. Also use 'in my own country' for natural preposition use. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And uh, in my country there are uh, different sports like Nathiagali, uh, there are different kind of mountains, uh, which giving me, which giving me breathtaking moment and the entire skyline or sky.

✓ In my country there are different spots like Nathiagali and various kinds of mountains, which give me breathtaking moments and wonderful skylines.

'Sports' is incorrect; likely 'spots' or 'places'. Use 'spots' and 'various kinds of mountains'. Change 'which giving me' to 'which give me' (subject-verb agreement and correct verb form). Use plural 'moments' and 'skylines' for consistency. Also replace 'the entire skyline or sky' with 'wonderful skylines' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× there are different kind of mountains, uh, which giving me, which giving me breathtaking moment

✓ there are different kinds of mountains, which give me breathtaking moments

'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to match plural 'mountains'. 'Which giving' is incorrect; use 'which give' for present simple relative clause. Also pluralize 'moment' to 'moments' to match generality. Grammar problem type ID:27