Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar, avoid filler words, and add one specific example to make the answer more vivid. Use a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details with a linking word, and a brief reason or example. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve good memories. For example, when I visited Chiang Mai last year I took many photos of the misty mountains and edited them lightly to highlight the colors, which helped me notice small details like morning fog and bird activity.

제안: Correct sentence structure and remove hesitations. State a clear preference or balanced view with linking words (e.g., 'however', 'whereas'), and give a specific contrast example. Fix unclear phrase 'I find about appealing'.

예시: It depends, but I slightly prefer rural views because I enjoy peaceful natural scenery. However, I also like cities for their tall buildings and busy streets; for instance, I like photographing city skylines at sunset, whereas in the countryside I focus on rivers and fields.

제안: This is a clear and natural answer; to improve, combine sentences with linking words and add a specific example comparing a Thai view with a foreign one. Keep it concise and avoid repeating 'both' twice.

예시: I enjoy both, because Thailand offers diverse scenery like the tropical beaches in the south, while travelling abroad gives me fresh perspectives — for example, I loved the alpine landscapes in Switzerland for their dramatic mountains, which contrast with Thailand's warm beaches.

× I like taking photos in different places because it helps me to keep good memories.

✓ I like taking photos in different places because it helps me keep good memories.

Remove the unnecessary to before keep: after helps, use the base verb (helps me keep) or helps me to keep; both are acceptable but 'helps me keep' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'helps me keep' for conciseness.

× When I travel I usually take pictures of things like forest or city view and edit them a bit.

✓ When I travel I usually take pictures of things like forests or city views and edit them a bit.

Use plural nouns 'forests' and 'city views' because 'things like' implies examples in plural form. Ensure noun forms match plural 'pictures'.

× I like, but in cities I enjoy seeing tall buildings and busy streets.

✓ It depends, but in cities I enjoy seeing tall buildings and busy streets.

Original 'I like, but...' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'It depends' completes the contrast and maintains coherence with previous question. Ensure sentence has a clear subject and verb.

× In rural areas I prefer the nature and peaceful atmosphere.

✓ In rural areas I prefer nature and a peaceful atmosphere.

Do not use the definite article 'the' with uncountable noun 'nature' in this context; add 'a' before 'peaceful atmosphere' to refer to one general quality.

× I find about appealing in their own ways.

✓ I find both appealing in their own ways.

The word 'about' is incorrect here; context indicates the student meant 'both'. Replacing with 'both' fixes meaning and yields correct sentence structure.