Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more clearly and directly: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), correct grammar (use singular/plural properly), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep responses under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, photographing city streets and rural landscapes lets me explore new cultures and scenery. Because it helps me relax and forget daily stress, I often go out with my camera on weekends.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then add 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitation and correct word choice (e.g., "rural areas," "it keeps me calm"). Use concise sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas. They are much quieter and greener than cities, so I feel calmer and more connected to nature when I walk or take photos there.

제안: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary: say whether you prefer local or foreign views, then explain briefly why with specific examples. Avoid unrelated words and filler. Keep sentences grammatical and coherent.

예시: I can't choose between them because I enjoy views both at home and abroad. For instance, I like discovering familiar landscapes in my country, but I also love exploring iconic sights overseas because each place offers different architecture and traditions.

× Umm, the man's creations for this is that, excuse me, an opportunity to explore the new culture, a new, umm, sceneries.

✓ Umm, for me this is an opportunity to explore new cultures and new sceneries.

The original uses unclear possessive 'the man's creations' and mismatched singular/plural 'a new ... sceneries'. Replace with 'for me' and make nouns plural or consistent: 'new cultures' (plural) and 'new sceneries' or better 'new scenery'. Use 'this is an opportunity' for correct subject-verb structure.

× Yeah, it thanks to this, I feel it's let me, uh, let my hair down.

✓ Yeah, thanks to this, I feel it lets me relax.

'It thanks to this' is incorrect; use 'thanks to this'. 'I feel it's let me' mixes tenses and forms. Use present simple 'it lets me' or 'it allows me to' and a natural verb 'relax' instead of 'let my hair down' if keeping more formal. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'it lets'.

× Definitely, I really love a few in rural areas.

✓ Definitely, I really love a few views in rural areas.

The phrase 'love a few' is ambiguous because 'a few' is a quantifier that requires a countable noun; the intended noun 'views' was omitted. Add the noun 'views' to complete the phrase.

× You know, it's really, uh, quiet.

✓ You know, it's really quiet there.

The original 'it's really quiet' is grammatical but lacks clarity about location. Adding 'there' clarifies the reference to rural areas and keeps present tense consistent.

× Yeah, it's keep me umm, transcuse umm did a lot of St. excuse me, umm a a a feeling of belonging.

✓ Yeah, it keeps me calm and gives me a feeling of belonging.

Original contains nonwords ('transcuse', 'did a lot of St.') and incorrect verb form 'it's keep me'. Use 'it keeps me' for subject-verb agreement and replace unclear fragments with coherent expressions: 'calm' and 'gives me a feeling of belonging'.

× Yeah, it's really hard for me to ensure, but for me, I breathe for views in all my country.

✓ Yeah, it's really hard for me to say, but I enjoy views all over my country.

'Ensure' is the wrong verb; use 'say' or 'decide'. 'I breathe for views' is incorrect — likely 'I long for views' or 'I enjoy views'. Also 'in all my country' should be 'all over my country'. Correct verb choice and preposition usage improves meaning.

× Yeah. Biscuits, you know, there's a lot of places I have never to visit anyone to have a chance to explore them.

✓ Also, you know, there are a lot of places I have never visited and I would like a chance to explore them.

'Biscuits' is irrelevant; use 'also' or 'besides'. 'There's a lot of places' should be 'there are a lot of places' (subject-verb agreement). 'I have never to visit anyone' is ungrammatical — use present perfect 'I have never visited' and add 'and I would like a chance to explore them' to express intent. Correct conjunctions and verb forms clarify meaning.