Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, give a brief reason with specific detail, and avoid informal slang like "chill". Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the river near my home, which calms me and improves my photography skills.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, explain one or two specific reasons, and avoid repetition. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "although") and combine short sentences into a coherent answer under five sentences.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the variety of architecture and the lively atmosphere. Although rural landscapes are peaceful, city skylines with interesting buildings and lights inspire my photography more.

제안: Correct grammatical errors and make the response more specific by mentioning examples of places or types of scenery. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetitive phrases like "many, many." Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam offers a wide range of scenery, from Ha Long Bay's limestone islands to the terraced fields in Sapa. Also, traveling around Vietnam is easy for me, so I can visit and photograph many different places.

× Yes, of course, because I find it taking a photo of great view is very relaxed and chill.

✓ Yes, of course, because I find taking photos of great views very relaxing and chill.

The phrase 'find it taking a photo of great view is' is incorrect. According to type 8 (Verb + -ing form), after 'find' when expressing an opinion, use 'find' + object + adjective (I find X relaxing) or 'find' + verb-ing (I find taking photos relaxing). Also plural nouns are needed: 'photos' and 'views'. 'Relaxed' describes a person, while 'relaxing' describes an activity, so use 'relaxing'. Combine these to form a natural sentence: 'I find taking photos of great views very relaxing.' Suggestion: Use 'find' + gerund and ensure correct plural nouns and adjective form.

× I think both of them are pretty good, but I prefer views in urban areas to rural areas. But just a little bit.

✓ I think both are pretty good, but I prefer urban views to rural ones, though only by a little.

This sentence has pronoun and redundancy issues (type 12). 'Both of them' is unnecessary when referring to 'urban and rural views'; 'views in urban areas' and 'rural areas' is wordy. 'Rural areas' should be matched with a noun form 'ones' to avoid repetition. Also 'but just a little bit' is informal and better expressed as 'though only by a little.' Suggestion: Use concise pronouns like 'both' and 'ones' to avoid repetition and ensure parallel structure.

× Absolutely is my country because in Vietnam we have many, many different places, have beautiful views and I can travel a lot.

✓ Absolutely my own country, because in Vietnam we have many different places with beautiful views and I can travel a lot.

This sentence uses awkward pronoun and structure (type 12). 'Absolutely is my country' is ungrammatical; say 'Absolutely my own country' or 'Absolutely, my country.' The clause 'we have many, many different places, have beautiful views' lacks a conjunction and proper verb linking; use 'with beautiful views' or 'that have beautiful views.' Also avoid repeated 'many.' Suggestion: Reorder to 'Absolutely my own country, because in Vietnam we have many different places with beautiful views and I can travel a lot.'