Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid run-on phrases and unclear clauses. Use linking words like 'so' or 'but' correctly.

예시: Not really. I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than take photos, because I find it more relaxing and it helps me remember experiences better. However, I sometimes take pictures when there is something special I want to share with friends.

제안: Correct pronunciation/word choice and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'first' and 'also'). Keep to 2–4 sentences and fix grammar (plural/singular, articles).

예시: I prefer rural views. First, they show natural landscapes that remind me of traditional life, and second, they feel quieter and less crowded than cities. For example, I enjoy walking by fields and old houses because they feel peaceful.

제안: Be clearer and avoid filler words like 'umm' and irrelevant words ('Cadillac'). Use a direct topic sentence, explain reason(s) and include a short prediction or comparison. Correct grammar and use linking words such as 'but' and 'however'.

예시: I prefer the views in my country for now because I haven't traveled abroad. The landscapes here are very beautiful and familiar, but I expect views in other countries would also be attractive if I get the chance to visit one day.

× I usually just like to enjoy the moment, breathe into nature and allow the time to run by where I create memories in my head, but capturing those moments.

✓ I usually just like to enjoy the moment, breathe in nature and let time run by while I create memories in my head, rather than capturing those moments.

Errors: 'breathe into nature' should be 'breathe in nature' (correct preposition with verb breathe) => Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) and verb + -ing form/structure. 'allow the time to run by' is awkward; 'let time run by' is natural. 'where I create' should be 'while I create' to indicate simultaneous actions (incorrect conjunction/structure). 'but capturing those moments' is a fragment; change to 'rather than capturing those moments' to show contrast and complete sentence. Suggestion: use correct prepositions with verbs, ensure clauses are connected with appropriate conjunctions and avoid sentence fragments. Note: This correction involves Grammar Problem Type IDs 8 and 11.

× I prefer view soon rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas.

Original has several issues: 'view' is singular but should be plural 'views' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue ID 1), 'soon' is incorrect word choice and likely a mis-typing of 'in' (incorrect word/preposition ID 11). Correct phrase: 'I prefer views in rural areas.' Suggestion: use plural for general preferences and use correct preposition 'in'. Note: This correction involves Grammar Problem Type IDs 1 and 11.

× That is because rural areas gives you a picture of what real life could look like.

✓ That is because rural areas give you a picture of what real life could look like.

'rural areas' is plural, so the verb must be plural: 'give' not 'gives' (subject-verb agreement ID 27). Suggestion: Match verb form to plural subject. Also the rest of the clause is fine.

× It doesn't take away the natural form of how the world was before development.

✓ It doesn't take away the natural form of how the world was before development.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'the natural form of how the world was before development' is slightly awkward. A clearer phrasing could be 'It doesn't take away the natural state the world had before development.' However, since instruction 2 says only correct mistakes that meet the list, no mandatory change is required. Explanation: tense use is consistent; suggestion to improve clarity by using 'state' and 'had' for smoother style. (No Grammar Problem Type change applied.)

× So the the rural area is my best part.

✓ So the rural area is my favorite part.

Duplicate 'the the' is a typographical/redundant article error (article errors ID 22). Also 'my best part' is unnatural; 'my favorite part' is idiomatic. Suggestion: remove duplicate article and use natural collocation 'favorite part'. Note: This correction involves Grammar Problem Type ID 22.

× I prefer the view of the rural area.

✓ I prefer the views of rural areas.

If speaking generally, use plural 'views' and plural 'rural areas' without 'the' to express a general preference (singular/plural issue ID 1 and article errors ID 22). Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and omit unnecessary definite article. Note: This correction involves Grammar Problem Type IDs 1 and 22.

× Umm, I wouldn't know how views in other countries would look like us.

✓ Umm, I wouldn't know what views in other countries would look like to me.

Problems: 'how views... would look like us' is incorrect structure. Use 'what... would look like to me' or 'what views in other countries would look like'. Also 'wouldn't know' plus 'would' is acceptable but avoid double modals; keep 'would' for conditional. Errors include incorrect pronoun usage and incorrect comparative structure (IDs 12 and 19). Suggestion: Use 'what... would look like to me' to convey personal perspective.

× I have never had the opportunity to travel to other country, but for the views I've had in my country, they are very beautiful and I know if I have the opportunity to have other views there would also be lovely too.

✓ I have never had the opportunity to travel to other countries, but the views I've seen in my country are very beautiful, and I know that if I had the opportunity to see views elsewhere, they would also be lovely.

Errors: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' (singular/plural ID 1). 'for the views I've had' is awkward; use 'the views I've seen'. Tense and conditional: use 'if I had the opportunity' instead of 'if I have' to match hypothetical past/conditional (past tense/conditional ID 5/7). Remove redundant 'also'/'too' (wordiness). Suggestion: use plural for general reference, choose verbs that collocate with 'views' (see, visit), and match conditional tense consistently.

× Cadillac.

✓ [remove 'Cadillac']

Single word 'Cadillac' is a non sequitur and unrelated to the response, creating a sentence structure/meaning error (sentence structure errors ID 26). Suggestion: remove it or replace with a relevant concluding word or phrase.