Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and limit redundancy. Add a linking phrase to connect your statement and example. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "pause to take photos" instead of "stopped to take photos").

예시: Not really. I prefer to enjoy the moment instead of pausing to take photos. For example, when I travel I usually put my phone away so I can fully focus on the experience with friends and family.

제안: Correct grammar (singular/plural and verb agreement) and improve coherence with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and one short example. Use accurate collocations ("rural areas", "the countryside", "I am attracted to").

예시: I prefer rural areas because I love natural landscapes like mountains and rivers. They make me feel relaxed and peaceful, and I am attracted to the clean air and quieter life in the countryside.

제안: Refine vocabulary and specificity. Use correct verb forms and more precise phrases ("see new species of animals" or "observe wildlife"), and give a short supporting detail or example of a memorable view abroad. Use a linking word to clarify cause and effect.

예시: I generally prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing new cultures and unfamiliar landscapes. For example, when I visited Costa Rica I loved observing exotic wildlife and the lush tropical scenery, which felt very different from home.

× I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than stopped to take photos.

✓ I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than stop to take photos.

The structure 'rather than' should be followed by the base form of the verb (infinitive without to) or a verb in the -ing form consistently. Here 'stopped' (past tense) is incorrect. Use the base form 'stop' to contrast with 'enjoy'. Suggestion: Use 'rather than' + base verb (I prefer to enjoy... rather than stop... ).

× For example, I often put my phone away when I'm traveling so that I can focus on the experience with my friends and family.

✓ For example, I often put my phone away when I travel so that I can focus on the experience with my friends and family.

The clause 'when I'm traveling' uses present continuous, which is acceptable, but when stating habitual actions, the simple present 'when I travel' is more natural and matches 'I often'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions (I often... when I travel).

× Personally, I prefer the view in rural area because I love the natural landscapes such as mountains and rivers.

✓ Personally, I prefer the view in rural areas because I love natural landscapes such as mountains and rivers.

Countable nouns like 'area' in this general sense should be plural ('rural areas') or preceded by an article ('a rural area'). Also 'the natural landscapes' is overly specific; 'natural landscapes' is more natural when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use plural for general categories or add an article for a single instance (rural areas or a rural area).

× They always makes me feel relaxed and peaceful and I also attracted to the clean air and quieter environment in countryside.

✓ They always make me feel relaxed and peaceful and I am also attracted to the clean air and quieter environment in the countryside.

Subject 'They' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. The phrase 'I also attracted' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am'. 'in countryside' requires the definite article 'the' when speaking generally about the countryside. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with the subject and include necessary auxiliary verbs; use 'the countryside' for the general area.

× I'd say I generally prefer views in other countries because I love experiencing new cultures and unfamiliar landscapes.

✓ I'd say I generally prefer views in other countries because I love experiencing new cultures and unfamiliar landscapes.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses appropriate modal 'I'd say' and present simple 'prefer' for general preference and present participle 'experiencing' correctly. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× For example, I love to watch the new species of animal in other countries.

✓ For example, I love to see new species of animals in other countries.

'The new species of animal' is too specific and awkward. Use plural 'species of animals' for general observation. Also 'watch' is acceptable for viewing behavior but 'see' or 'observe' is more natural for encountering species. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general statements about species and choose 'see' or 'observe' for wildlife (see new species of animals).