Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency and accuracy by removing hesitations, correcting grammar, and using a clear topic sentence with one or two supporting details. Focus on correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement, and keep the answer concise (max 3–4 sentences). Use linking phrase to connect idea and reason.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they often look beautiful and make me feel relaxed. For example, photographing a sunset by the sea helps me appreciate colors and calms me down. I also like trying different angles to capture the scene better.

제안: Clarify preference with correct grammar and specific reasons. State your choice directly, then give one or two clear reasons with linking words (for example, because, for instance). Avoid contradic­tions and confusing vocabulary; choose precise words (open spaces, greenery, crowded).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because open spaces and greenery help me relax. For instance, walking by a quiet lake or through fields reduces my stress and lets me breathe fresh air, whereas city scenes often feel noisy and busy.

제안: Make a clear, direct statement and support it with a specific, coherent example. Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and use appropriate vocabulary (landscapes, cultures, wildlife). Use one linking word to introduce an example.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and cultures. For example, visiting the Arctic would let me see unique ice formations and wildlife that I cannot find in my country, which is very exciting.

× I can umm, I can see different uh, view are very beautiful and joyful and make me feel very free when I take the picture.

✓ I can see different views; they are very beautiful and joyful and make me feel very free when I take pictures.

Original mixes singular/plural and uses incorrect pronoun reference. 'view are' is wrong: 'view' should be plural 'views' and needs a subject for the verb 'are'. Replace with 'they are' to refer to the views. Also use plural 'pictures' for general habit. Suggestion: separate ideas with a semicolon or conjunction and maintain consistent plural forms. ID:12

× I think I prefer view in rural every year because the open less scared and green Navy help me relax and feel refreshed.

✓ I think I prefer views in rural areas every year because the open spaces and greenery help me relax and feel refreshed.

Several pluralization errors and incorrect nouns: 'view' should be 'views', 'rural' needs noun 'areas', 'open less scared' is unintelligible and likely 'open spaces', 'green Navy' is incorrect – use 'greenery'. Use plural verbs agreement: 'greenery help' is acceptable but 'spaces and greenery help' matches plural. Suggest checking noun forms and collocations. ID:1

× I like crowded in the city since for example say you find and disturb videos can reduce my stress.

✓ I like the crowds in the city because, for example, watching videos about the city can reduce my stress.

Original uses 'crowded' (adjective) where noun 'crowds' is needed. The clause 'for example say you find and disturb videos' is ungrammatical; guess intended meaning is 'watching videos' or 'seeing videos' about the city. Use 'because' to link reason. Suggest using correct noun forms and clear verb phrases like 'watching videos'. ID:13

× I prefer this seasonally in other country because I enjoy seeing different landscape and cultural.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries seasonally because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and cultures.

Pronoun/word order and noun forms incorrect: 'this seasonally in other country' should be 'visiting other countries seasonally' to express the action and plurality. 'landscape and cultural' are adjectives/nouns mismatch; use plural nouns 'landscapes and cultures'. Suggest using the gerund 'visiting' and correct plural nouns. ID:12

× For example, visiting the Arctic uh would let me experience with eye films and white life that I can see in my country.

✓ For example, visiting the Arctic would let me experience the icy landscapes and wildlife that I cannot see in my country.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'experience with' is incorrect; say 'experience' directly. 'eye films and white life' appears to be misheard; intended 'icy landscapes and wildlife'. Also change 'can see in my country' to 'cannot see in my country' to justify visiting. Suggest choosing correct nouns and avoiding extra prepositions after 'experience'. ID:11}]} PMID:27]}{