Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and grammar errors, and add one specific detail to make your answer vivid. Use linking words if adding extra information.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like natural landscapes such as forests and lakes because their colors and light change throughout the day, which makes each photo unique.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct common grammar mistakes, avoid filler phrases, and include a specific reason or example. Use a linking word to connect the reason to a supporting detail.

예시: I prefer photographing urban views because I enjoy the diversity of architecture and street life. For example, I like capturing tall buildings, colorful market scenes and people commuting, which show the city’s character.

제안: Start with a clear preference sentence, eliminate hesitations and grammar errors, and give two concise supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Provide a concrete example from a family trip to illustrate your point.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because the places feel familiar and are tied to family memories. For instance, we often visit nearby lakes and mountains, and those scenes remind me of childhood; however, I also appreciate foreign scenery because it offers new cultural perspectives.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I am so obsessed to taking pictures of mine and different kinds of natural views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I am so obsessed with taking pictures of mine and different kinds of natural views.

The verb 'obsessed' requires the preposition 'with' followed by a noun or gerund. 'Obsessed to taking' is incorrect. Use 'obsessed with taking' to show fixation on an activity. Also 'mine' is informal here but acceptable if referring to 'my photos'; consider 'my photos' for clarity.

× On my perspective, I like to click pictures in urban areas because I like different kinds of buildings and lifestyle of the peoples kind of.

✓ From my perspective, I like to take pictures in urban areas because I like the different kinds of buildings and the lifestyles of the people.

Use 'from my perspective' not 'on my perspective'. 'Click pictures' is informal; use 'take pictures'. 'Lifestyle of the peoples kind of' is ungrammatical: use 'the lifestyles of the people' or 'people's lifestyles'. Include definite articles 'the' where referring to specific kinds.

× On my perspective, I like to click pictures in urban areas because I like different kinds of buildings and lifestyle of the peoples kind of. So I like to click pictures and views in urban areas.

✓ From my perspective, I like to take pictures in urban areas because I like the different kinds of buildings and the lifestyles of people. So I like to take pictures of urban views.

'Peoples' is incorrect pluralization; 'people' is the plural noun. Also 'lifestyle' should be plural when referring to multiple groups. 'Click pictures' should be 'take pictures'. Revised second sentence to avoid repetition and improve clarity.

× I prefer views in my own country because uh, there is people are too familiar and evoke and such is my family trips nearby mountains and lakes.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because the people are familiar and it evokes memories, such as family trips to nearby mountains and lakes.

'There is people are' is ungrammatical; use 'the people are' or 'people are'. 'Evoke' needs an object; use 'it evokes memories'. 'Such is my family trips' is incorrect structure; use 'such as family trips to nearby...' to give examples.

× I prefer views in my own country because uh, there is people are too familiar and evoke and such is my family trips nearby mountains and lakes. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad for its novelty and cultural differences.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because the people are familiar and it evokes memories of family trips to nearby mountains and lakes. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad for its novelty and cultural differences.

Original sentence has multiple structural problems: redundant 'there is' plus verb, missing object for 'evoke', and awkward phrase 'such is my family trips nearby'. Fixing word order and adding necessary articles and objects clarifies meaning while keeping contrast with the final sentence.