Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Content is relevant but delivery has many errors in word choice, collocation and clarity. Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting details using correct vocabulary (e.g., travel, regions, landscapes, cityscapes, light, atmosphere). Avoid redundant or incorrect words and focus on clear reasons or examples.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because I love traveling to new regions and capturing diverse landscapes and cityscapes. For example, I often photograph how the light changes at sunrise and the unique atmosphere of each place, which helps me remember the experience.

제안: The answer is generally clear and relevant but contains inappropriate word choice and some repetition. Use accurate collocations (e.g., 'vibrant atmosphere' not 'violent atmosphere') and avoid repeating phrases. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences: state preference, give specific reasons, and add a brief example if useful. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy skyscrapers and the vibrant atmosphere of busy streets. I also like the variety of shops, restaurants and cultural events, which makes the city feel exciting and full of opportunities. For example, I often photograph street festivals and modern architecture when I visit cities.

제안: Meaning is understandable but heavy with incorrect words and unclear phrases. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., 'I prefer views in my own country.') and then give specific supporting details with correct vocabulary and smooth linking (use 'because', 'for example', 'also'). Avoid unrelated or garbled words. Mention concrete places or features to make it specific.

예시: I prefer views in my own country. For example, Japan offers a mix of modern skyscrapers and well-preserved historical sites in its cities, and it also has beautiful natural landscapes like mountains and coastal scenery that I love to photograph.

× I'm key in taking pictures of different views because I love traveling to other religions, religions and seeing different landscapes and cityscapes that I can't remember the light, courage and atmosphere.

✓ I'm keen on taking pictures of different views because I love traveling to other regions and seeing different landscapes and cityscapes; I can't remember the light, color and atmosphere.

The original sentence contains several issues: 'key in' is incorrect collocation — 'keen on' expresses strong interest (Grammar Problem Type ID 26: Sentence structure errors). 'religions, religions' is a repeated incorrect word; likely intended 'regions' (11: Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 'I can't remember the light, courage and atmosphere' uses wrong verb and noun: 'remember' is inappropriate and 'courage' is the wrong noun; 'can't forget' or better 'I love the light, color and atmosphere' fits meaning (26: Sentence structure errors and 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: use correct collocations ('keen on'), correct word ('regions'), and choose nouns that match meaning ('color' instead of 'courage'). Note: Changes follow the allowed correction types from the list (sentence structure and word choice corrected to produce a grammatical, natural sentence).

× Definitely, I **** prefer urban areas because I like skyscrapers and the violent atmosphere of busy streets.

✓ Definitely, I prefer urban areas because I like skyscrapers and the vibrant atmosphere of busy streets.

'****' appears as placeholder/noise and must be removed (26: Sentence structure errors). 'violent atmosphere' is a wrong word choice for describing busy streets; 'vibrant' or 'lively' is appropriate (13: Incorrect use of adjectives). Suggestion: remove extraneous characters and replace 'violent' with 'vibrant' or 'lively' to convey excitement rather than danger. (This correction keeps the present tense and agreement with the subject 'I'.)

× I also enjoy the variety of shops, restaurants and events which makes me makes the city feel exciting and full of opportunities.

✓ I also enjoy the variety of shops, restaurants and events, which make the city feel exciting and full of opportunities.

The clause 'which makes me makes the city' contains repetition and a subject-verb agreement issue: the relative pronoun 'which' refers to a plural noun phrase ('shops, restaurants and events'), so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' (27: Subject-verb agreement errors). Also, 'makes me makes' is an accidental duplication (26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: remove the duplicated words and use 'make' to agree with the plural antecedent; place a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause. Note: tense remains present to match the context.

× I prefer singing in my own country.

✓ I prefer sightseeing in my own country.

'Singing' is incorrect in context; the question asks about preferring views in own country or other countries, so 'sightseeing' is the intended gerund (8: Verb + -ing form / 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use 'sightseeing' which correctly expresses visiting places to see views. Tense and form (present simple preference) are retained.

× Japan has a great variety of singly modern oven skyscrapers and historical sites in the cities, as well as beautiful N natural landscapes like mountains.

✓ Japan has a great variety of modern skyscrapers and historical sites in the cities, as well as beautiful natural landscapes like mountains.

This sentence contains multiple incorrect or extraneous words: 'singly' and 'oven' are incorrect and should be removed (26: Sentence structure errors). 'N' before 'natural' is erroneous; remove it (26). The adjective order 'modern skyscrapers' is correct; no need for extra modifiers. Suggestion: delete unintended words and keep 'modern skyscrapers and historical sites' and 'beautiful natural landscapes' to convey the intended meaning. The present tense description is preserved.