Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn trong tối đa 5 câu, dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, nối các ý bằng liên từ và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “beauty”, “city”), sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ thì và cấu trúc động từ) và loại bỏ tiếng ầm ừ. Bạn nên nói rõ khi nào bạn chụp ảnh, loại cảnh bạn thích nhất và lợi ích cụ thể bạn nhận được.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like natural landscapes such as mountains and beaches because they have rich colors and textures. When I take photos, I can notice small details I would otherwise miss, which inspires my creativity. For example, photographing a sunset helped me learn about light and composition.

제안: Câu trả lời cần có câu chủ đề rõ ràng (nói thẳng thích vùng nông thôn), tránh lỗi ngữ âm và diễn đạt lặp lại, dùng liên từ để nối lí do và ví dụ. Cần hoàn thành ý và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động bạn làm khi ở đồng quê). Sửa ngữ pháp như “I love seeing rural areas” và “it helps me relax”.

예시: I prefer rural areas because their peaceful atmosphere helps me relax. For instance, walking through the fields clears my mind and reduces stress. I also enjoy listening to birds and observing local farms, which makes me feel calmer than in busy cities.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và mạch lạc, tránh lặp và tiếng ầm ừ. Nên giải thích rõ lý do (tự hào, quen thuộc, hoặc chưa khám phá hết) và bổ sung ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm bạn thích. Giữ trong tối đa 5 câu, dùng liên từ để nối ý và chỉnh ngữ pháp: “I prefer views in my own country because I haven't had time to explore all its places” hoặc “I feel proud of its landscapes”.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel proud of its landscapes and still have many places to explore. For example, I love the coastal cliffs near my hometown and hope to photograph them more. Being familiar with local scenery also makes me feel comfortable and connected to my culture.

× Of course, yes, when captured photos I have more chances to see the beautiful landscapes and scenery like nature, beauty, uh city, cityscape and this can boost my creativity skills too.

✓ Of course. When I have captured photos, I have more chances to see beautiful landscapes and scenery such as nature and cityscapes, and this can boost my creativity.

Use of 'captured' alone is incorrect because the student omitted the subject and auxiliary required for a perfect construction. The correct form is 'When I have captured photos' (present perfect) to show experience or recent actions relevant now. Remove redundant words ('beauty, uh') and pluralize 'cityscape' to 'cityscapes' for consistency. Also combine clauses with proper punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: include the subject 'I' and the auxiliary 'have' before the past participle to form present perfect; keep noun lists parallel and concise.

× I love you seeing rural areas more because when because the peaceful atmosphere in the country makes me more relaxed and wide down and it really can clear my mind it for example, when I go through the the fields I can.

✓ I prefer seeing rural areas because the peaceful atmosphere in the countryside makes me more relaxed and it really clears my mind. For example, when I walk through the fields I feel calm.

Multiple tense and word choice problems: 'I love you seeing' is incorrect; use 'I prefer seeing' or 'I love seeing'. Remove redundant 'because when because'. Use simple present 'clears' to describe a general truth. 'Wide down' is incorrect and should be 'calm' or 'wind down'. The fragment 'it for example, when I go through the the fields I can' is incomplete; complete the thought with 'I feel calm' or similar. Suggestions: use correct subject-verb constructions for habitual/general statements (simple present), avoid repetitions, and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

× Actually, I love views in my own country because I don't have because I haven't yet have have time to explore more places in my country.

✓ Actually, I love views in my own country because I haven't yet had time to explore many places in it.

The original contains multiple auxiliary and tense errors: 'I don't have because I haven't yet have have time' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'I haven't yet had time' to indicate experience up to now. Also simplify repetition 'in my country' to 'in it' or keep one mention. Suggestion: use 'I haven't yet had time' for actions not completed up to the present and avoid stacking auxiliaries.

× I feel very proud and feel umm, familiar with the scenery of my country too.

✓ I feel very proud and familiar with the scenery of my country.

Redundant verbs 'feel very proud and feel familiar' can be combined to 'feel very proud and familiar'. Remove hesitation 'umm'. Keep parallel structure for clarity. Suggestion: combine related adjectives after a single verb to make the sentence concise and natural.

× So I love uh, I.

✓ So I love it.

Fragment and hesitation: 'So I love uh, I.' is incomplete and missing the object. Likely intended 'So I love it.' Remove hesitation 'uh' and supply the object 'it' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: avoid filler words and ensure sentences are complete with subject and verb and, when needed, an object.