Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, with clear reasons and examples. To improve, correct minor grammar errors (e.g., 'angle' → 'angles', 'lightning' → 'lighting'), avoid redundancy (combine similar ideas), and keep within 3–4 concise sentences. Add one specific example of a memorable photo to make it more vivid.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of scenery when I travel. For example, last summer I photographed a misty lake at sunrise, which helped me remember the calm atmosphere and the pale colours of the sky. I also enjoy experimenting with different angles and lighting to capture the best composition.

제안: Your idea is clear but the answer has grammatical problems and is too long in one sentence. Improve by starting with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct phrasing ('the Lura area out of nature' is unclear). Mention a specific rural scene or sensory detail to be more concrete.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and relaxing. For example, when I visit the countryside near Lura, I enjoy photographing golden sunsets over rice fields and breathing the fresh air, which always makes me feel refreshed.

제안: Good content and clear preference, but fix repetition ('types types') and improve cohesion with a linking phrase. Keep it concise and add one specific example of a foreign view or architectural style you enjoyed to strengthen the answer.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because foreign landscapes and architecture feel more exotic. For instance, I was fascinated by the colourful rooftops and narrow streets in Lisbon, which gave me a fresh perspective and inspired many of my photos.

× Photography is a relaxing hobby for me and I like to experiment with different angle and lightning to get the perfect shot.

✓ Photography is a relaxing hobby for me and I like to experiment with different angles and lighting to get the perfect shot.

Two noun errors: 'angle' should be plural 'angles' because 'different' implies more than one; 'lightning' is incorrect word meaning electrical discharge; the correct word is 'lighting' meaning arrangement of light. Suggestion: use 'different angles' and 'lighting' when discussing camera composition.

× Personally, I prefer the views in the Lura area out of nature or scenery like mountains, rivers and fields is much more peaceful and relaxing and I always feel refreshed when I take photos of sunsets or just enjoy the fresh air in the countryside.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in rural areas because scenery like mountains, rivers, and fields is much more peaceful and relaxing, and I always feel refreshed when I take photos of sunsets or just enjoy the fresh air in the countryside.

Original sentence has a confused structure and incorrect phrase 'in the Lura area out of nature'. Rewritten to clarify meaning: 'prefer views in rural areas' and use 'because' to introduce reason. Commas added to separate clauses and list. Suggestion: keep subject and reason clear and use commas to join independent clauses.

× I actually prefer the views in other countries because foreign landscapes feel more exotic and exciting.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries because foreign landscapes feel more exotic and exciting.

Definite article 'the' before 'views' is unnecessary when speaking generally about views in other countries. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to things in general.

× I love experiencing new cultures and seeing different types types of architecture and traveling abroad always gives me a fresh perspective on life.

✓ I love experiencing new cultures and seeing different types of architecture, and traveling abroad always gives me a fresh perspective on life.

There is a duplicated word 'types types' which is a typographical/repetition error. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction to separate two independent clauses. Suggestion: remove duplicate and use comma before 'and' when joining independent clauses.