Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and add one concise supporting detail. Use linking words only if adding more than one detail.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel. I take pictures to record memories so I can look back on special moments later.

제안: Clarify and simplify your reasons; avoid negative-sounding words like “chaotic” if you mean lively. Use one or two supporting details with linking words for coherence. Correct small grammar and phrasing issues.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the city's energy and skyline. For example, I like watching busy streets and modern architecture, which feel exciting and inspiring.

제안: Work on vocabulary accuracy and sentence structure. Replace incorrect word choices (e.g., “cynic”) with precise adjectives like “scenic.” Avoid filler words and use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, future forms). Give a clear reason for your choice in one added sentence.

예시: Both domestic and foreign views are scenic and breathtaking, but if I had to choose, I would prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and remind me of home and family traditions.

× Yes, I'm really like taking pictures of different views, especially when I traveling.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views, especially when I am traveling.

The student used 'I'm really like' which mixes 'be' + like incorrectly. The correct pattern is 'I really like'. Also 'when I traveling' is missing the auxiliary 'am' before the present participle 'traveling'. Suggestion: use 'I really like' and 'when I am traveling' to form correct present continuous structure for the action occurring while traveling.

× I want to take picture to record the memories and I can look back whenever I want.

✓ I want to take pictures to record memories and I can look back whenever I want.

'Take picture' needs plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue) and 'the memories' is unnecessary; 'memories' without an article is more natural here. Also 'to record the memories' is fine but consistent plural forms are required. Suggestion: use 'take pictures' and 'record memories' for natural expression.

× I prefer views in urban areas where I am living because I like the hustle and bustle of the city and the crowded and chaotic people.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas where I live because I like the hustle and bustle of the city and the crowded, chaotic streets.

'Where I am living' is awkward; 'where I live' is the normal present simple for a permanent or current residence. 'The crowded and chaotic people' is unnatural; people are not usually described as 'crowded'; 'crowded, chaotic streets' or 'the busy, chaotic atmosphere' is better. Suggestion: use 'where I live' and describe locations or atmosphere rather than calling people 'crowded'.

× They're all busy and working really hard, which is the thing that I really love to see every day.

✓ They're all busy and working really hard, which is something I really love to see every day.

'Which is the thing that I really love' is wordy and unidiomatic. 'Something' is more natural than 'the thing' here. Also keep concise relative clause: 'which is something I really love to see every day.' Suggestion: simplify relative clauses and use 'something' for generalizations.

× For me both the views in another country and my country is cynic and breathtaking.

✓ For me, both the views in other countries and in my country are scenic and breathtaking.

Subject-verb agreement: 'both ... and ...' requires plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Another country' should be plural 'other countries' to match 'both', and 'cynic' is a wrong word; the correct adjective is 'scenic'. Suggestion: use 'both the views in other countries and in my country are scenic and breathtaking.'

× Umm but if I have to choose one, I gonna prefer the view in my country.

✓ If I have to choose one, I would prefer the view in my country.

'Gonna' is informal spoken slang and should be replaced by 'would' (conditional) to express preference. Also use 'would prefer' to indicate hypothetical choice. Suggestion: use 'I would prefer' in formal responses.