Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh tiếng ậm ừ và lặp từ. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cảnh bạn thích, lý do và cách bạn lưu giữ ảnh). Hạn chế kéo dài câu quá mức và dùng từ đúng ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'taking pictures' không phải 'taking picture', 'nature' không cần nhiều số ít/ số nhiều sai).

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of natural scenery. I particularly enjoy photographing mountains and lakes because their colours change with the light, and I often review my photos later to remember those moments.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: đưa ra lựa chọn, giải thích cụ thể với lý do và một ví dụ ngắn. Tránh từ không chính xác như 'fast environ' hoặc lặp từ; dùng từ phù hợp như 'busy environment' hoặc 'peaceful atmosphere'. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu súc tích.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more peaceful and natural. For example, I enjoy walking through quiet fields and forests where I can relax and take clearer photographs away from busy city noise.

제안: Cần diễn đạt ý rõ ràng: đưa ra quan điểm cụ thể (ví dụ: thích cảnh nước ngoài hơn), giải thích vì sao với lý do cụ thể (sự mới lạ, văn hóa khác), và có thể nêu ví dụ ngắn. Sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'I could see' → 'I prefer', 'I was too familiar' → 'I am too familiar'). Tránh lặp từ và ậm ừ.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because everything feels new and different to me. For instance, I enjoy exploring unfamiliar architecture and landscapes that are unlike what I see at home, which makes travelling more exciting.

× Umm, I think taking picture of nature is a part of my life.

✓ Umm, I think taking pictures of nature is a part of my life.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' after the verb form 'taking' because you refer to taking photos in general. Use plural to match the general activity. Suggestion: use 'taking pictures' or 'taking photos' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, I always want to capture every moment of the natures umm surrounding me in uh and I was re watches every time that I umm.

✓ Uh, I always want to capture every moment of the nature surrounding me, and I rewatch those moments every time.

Incorrect use of 'the natures' (there is no plural form with the article) and awkward phrasing 'I was re watches'. Use 'the nature' (uncountable) or 'nature' without 'the'; 'rewatch' should be present tense verb 'rewatch' and object 'those moments'. Suggestion: simplify to 'capture every moment of the nature surrounding me and I rewatch those moments'.

× I don't have anything to watch like YouTube videos.

✓ I don't have anything to watch, like YouTube videos.

Missing comma improves clarity; sentence structure is acceptable but contextually odd. Ensure parallelism: 'anything to watch, such as YouTube videos' or 'I don't usually watch videos like those on YouTube.' Suggestion: use 'such as' or rephrase for clarity.

× Because more of a time I spend my life in urban areas, so rural areas are way more attractive to me.

✓ Because I spend most of my time in urban areas, rural areas are much more attractive to me.

'More of a time' is incorrect; use quantifier 'most of my time'. Also 'so' is redundant after 'because'. Use 'much more' for emphasis. Suggestion: 'Because I spend most of my time in urban areas, rural areas are much more attractive to me.'

× Umm, I always immerse myself in nature, in the fast environ, in the fast atmosphere.

✓ Umm, I always immerse myself in nature, in the fast environment, in the fast atmosphere.

The word 'environ' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'environment'. 'Fast atmosphere' is awkward but grammatically acceptable; consider 'fast-paced environment' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'fast-paced environment'.

× I could see in other country, of course, because, uh, it is something strange and I want to find out this is, uh, is my country.

✓ I could see places in other countries, of course, because they feel unfamiliar and I want to find out whether this is my country.

Missing plural 'countries' and incorrect preposition 'see in other country'. 'Something strange' should be 'they feel unfamiliar' and 'find out whether' is the correct structure. Suggestion: 'I could visit other countries because they feel unfamiliar and I want to see whether I feel at home there.'

× I, I were too familiar with all the things.

✓ I was too familiar with everything.

Subject 'I' requires verb 'was', not 'were'. Use 'everything' instead of 'all the things' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: 'I was too familiar with everything.'

× So, uh, the, the other are much better.

✓ So, the others are much better.

Redundant repetition and incorrect noun form 'the other' should be plural 'the others' when comparing multiple things. Suggestion: 'So, the others are much better.'