Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and complete: open with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (e.g., “uh”), and add one brief supporting detail. Use one linking word if you add a reason. Also keep to max 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love photography. For example, in my free time I often walk around my neighborhood to capture interesting light and colors. This helps me improve my composition and creativity.

제안: Organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” / “also”). Avoid repetition and grammatical errors; use correct comparatives and plural forms. Keep sentences shorter and finish the thought.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and offer more natural scenes. For example, rural farms and small towns have open fields and rustic buildings that make interesting photo subjects. Also, there is less traffic and noise, so I can take time to compose my shots carefully.

제안: Make a direct comparison and be specific: start with a clear statement (I like both / I prefer X), then give concise reasons and an example. Avoid repetition, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), and keep to 2–3 sentences with linking words like “because” or “however.”

예시: I like views in both my country and abroad, but I have a special fondness for India because it offers very diverse landscapes. For instance, you can photograph vibrant rural festivals and crowded urban markets, so there is always something unique to capture.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I love photography. So, uh, in my free time.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I love photography, and I do it in my free time.

The original contains a sentence fragment ('So, uh, in my free time.') that lacks a verb and connection to the preceding sentence. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine the fragment with the main sentence and add a clear verb phrase ('I do it') to make a complete sentence and improve fluency. Remove filler words like 'uh' for clarity.

× As my point of view, I prefer the views in the rural areas because it was more quiet as compared to urban areas because urban areas very congested with the traffic and rural areas are quite with the farms and small towns which are very interesting of taking pictures because moreover they are more beautiful as compared to natural sceneries in the cities. So I do prefer taking the.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter than urban areas: cities are very congested with traffic, while rural areas have farms and small towns that are more interesting to photograph and often more beautiful than urban scenery.

This sentence contains multiple problems; the most prominent is incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and comparative structures (ID 13). 'More quiet' should be 'quieter'; 'urban areas very congested' lacks a verb; 'rural areas are quite with the farms' is ungrammatical; 'interesting of taking pictures' should be 'interesting to photograph'; 'more beautiful as compared to natural sceneries in the cities' should be 'more beautiful than urban scenery'. Also the ending fragment 'So I do prefer taking the.' is incomplete. Break into clear clauses, use correct comparative forms, include necessary verbs, and replace awkward phrases for natural phrasing.

× As each country has its own beauty and my my original country is India and it is very, it is very unique because there are a lot of people with the rural in the rural area. So they took pictures and in urban areas.

✓ Each country has its own beauty. My home country is India, which is very unique; many people live in rural areas and they take pictures there as well as in urban areas.

This contains pronoun and reference issues (ID 12) and sentence structure problems. Repeating 'my my' is an error; 'it is very unique because there are a lot of people with the rural in the rural area' is unclear and misuses pronouns and prepositions. Clarify references ('which' referring to India), correct pronoun use, and use appropriate verbs ('live' instead of 'with the rural') and tenses ('take' instead of 'took') to match the present-tense general statement.