Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حسّن إجابتك بجملة موضوع واضحة ومكتملة ثم وضّح لماذا تحب ذلك مع تفاصيل محددة. تجنّب الكلمات الناقصة والتركيبات غير الصحيحة. ركّز على قواعد بسيطة وصياغة طبيعية.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing sunsets and city skylines because the light and colours change quickly, which makes each photo unique. I usually use my phone and try different angles to capture interesting shapes.

제안: اجب بجملة واضحة تحدد تفضيلك ثم قدّم سببين داعمين مع ربط منطقي بواسطة أدوات ربط مثل "because" أو "for example". اجعل الجمل قصيرة وواضحة وتجنّب الترجمة الحرفية من العربية.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they offer more natural scenery and peaceful settings. For example, mountains, lakes and flower fields provide colourful and calm backgrounds that improve my photos. I often share these pictures on social media because friends appreciate the scenery.

제안: قدّم جوابًا مباشرًا يوضّح تفضيلك ثم سلّط الضوء على أسباب محددة مع أمثلة واضحة. استخدم تراكيب بسيطة وابتعد عن الكلمات المترددة مثل "umm". اذكر فرقًا محددًا بين المشاهد المحلية والأجنبية إن أمكن.

예시: I prefer seeing views in other countries because travelling lets me experience different cultures and landscapes. For example, visiting Japan would allow me to see unique gardens and mountains that are different from those at home, which would broaden my knowledge and inspire my photography.

× Yes, I like to pick different.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenes.

The student used the infinitive 'to pick' and an incomplete object, which does not match the intended continuous activity of photography. Use the gerund 'taking' after 'like' to express a habitual preference, and provide a clear noun phrase 'pictures of different scenes'. Suggestion: Use 'like' + verb-ing for preferences (e.g., 'I like taking photos').

× I think it's rural area because there are many views.

✓ I think rural areas, because there are many viewpoints.

The phrase 'it's rural area' is incorrect article and number usage and 'views' is vague. Use the plural 'rural areas' and the noun 'viewpoints' or 'scenic views'. Also avoid contraction 'it's' for 'it is' referring to areas. Suggestion: Match plurality and use clearer nouns (e.g., 'rural areas' and 'viewpoints').

× Would you like to picture in this mountain or a lake or flower?

✓ Would you like to take pictures of a mountain, a lake, or flowers?

'Picture in' is incorrect; the verb for making photos is 'take pictures of'. Use articles with countable nouns ('a mountain', 'a lake') and plural for 'flowers' to be natural. Suggestion: Use 'take pictures of' + object and include appropriate articles.

× This make it your picture very beautiful or comfortable of the others and you can share it on Instagram or.

✓ This makes your picture very beautiful and pleasing to others, and you can share it on Instagram.

Subject-verb agreement: 'This' (singular) requires 'makes' not 'make'. The phrase 'comfortable of the others' is incorrect; use 'pleasing to others' or 'appealing to others'. Also complete the sentence after 'Instagram'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with subject and choose correct collocations ('pleasing to others').

× Because there are many, a few do you like it to see and really live, for example, like a mountain or flowers or anything others like Japanese, umm, culture that's very beautiful to improvement your, uh, knowledge.

✓ There are many places you might like to see and experience, for example mountains, flowers, or cultural attractions like those in Japan, which are beautiful and improve your knowledge.

The original sentence is disorganized with incorrect connectors, pronoun use, and awkward phrases ('a few do you like it to see and really live'). Reorganize into a clear main clause: 'There are many places you might like to see and experience', list examples with correct plural forms, and use a relative clause 'which are beautiful and improve your knowledge' for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple sentence structure: main clause + examples + relative clause; avoid filler words and ensure correct word order.