Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and pronunciation, avoid repetition, and keep answers within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide one or two specific details (when, what you photographed, why it was memorable).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I visited Rio de Janeiro I went up to Christ the Redeemer and took panoramic shots of the city; the sweeping coastline and mountains looked breathtaking. That experience stayed with me because the light and scale were unforgettable.

제안: Answer directly with a clear present-tense preference, avoid vague modifiers and redundancy, and give a specific reason with one detail. Use a linking word (because/so) to show cause. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I love natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy photographing forests and rivers where the light and textures change throughout the day, creating more peaceful and varied images.

제안: Correct pronunciation and grammar (e.g., 'prefer' not 'pears'), state preference clearly, and give specific examples and reason. Avoid repetition and end with a complete sentence. Use 2–3 sentences with a linking word (because/for example).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because the Philippines offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, its mountains and beaches provide beautiful scenes that are perfect for memorable photos and travel albums.

× Yes, I liked doing photography of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking photographs of different views.

The student used past tense 'liked' but is answering a general preference question in the present; use present simple 'like'. Also 'doing photography' is awkward; use 'taking photographs' for natural collocation and plural 'photographs' for countable items.

× Like for example, when I was in Rio de Janeiro, Brazil, I went up to Cristo Dental, one of the a famous tourist spot in Brazil.

✓ For example, when I was in Rio de Janeiro, Brazil, I went up to Christ the Redeemer, one of the famous tourist spots in Brazil.

The clause refers to a past specific visit so past tense 'was' and 'went' are fine, but there are article and noun errors: 'one of the a famous' is incorrect—use 'one of the famous' and 'tourist spots' plural. Also the monument name was likely misnamed; use the correct name 'Christ the Redeemer' for clarity.

× So I took the panoramic shots of the city.

✓ So I took panoramic shots of the city.

The definite article 'the' before 'panoramic shots' is unnecessary in this general description; removing it improves naturalness. This is a minor sentence structure/usage issue.

× It's really, it's truly a breathtaking and you know, a memorable if.

✓ It was truly breathtaking and very memorable.

Mixed tenses and filler words create an ungrammatical sentence. Match past tense 'was' with the past event, use adjectives properly: 'breathtaking' and 'memorable'. Remove fillers like 'you know' and the unfinished 'if'.

× I preferred the views in the rural areas because it's actually all about nature and I am truly a nature lover and this will be a very good and excellent, you know, a memorable compilation in my part.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because it's all about nature; I am truly a nature lover and it would make a very memorable compilation for me.

Question asks preference in general, so use present simple 'prefer' not past 'preferred'. Also maintain consistent tense: 'it would make' or 'it would be' fits hypothetical result. Remove redundant words 'a very good and excellent' and filler 'you know'; change 'in my part' to 'for me' for correct phrasing.

× I prefer pears in my own country because in the Philippines we have lots of natural views like for example mountains, beaches and this really will give me a very pleasant pictures that I can put in my album as a memory as.

✓ I prefer places in my own country because in the Philippines we have many natural landscapes, such as mountains and beaches, and these would give me very pleasant pictures that I can put in my album as memories.

The student wrote 'pears' instead of 'places' (word choice/pronunciation error) and mixed singular/plural and article usage. Use 'many' for countable plural 'landscapes' and 'such as' for examples. Match plural 'these' with 'pictures' and use 'would' for hypothetical result. 'Memories' plural fits 'pictures'. Also remove redundant 'for example' repetition and the trailing 'as'.