Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "landscapes" twice) and fix sentence structure ("I experiment with different angles").

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views as a hobby. For example, I often experiment with different angles and compositions to capture landscapes more dramatically, and I keep these photos as memories to look back on.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague fragments with full clauses, avoid fillers ("UH"), and correct verb forms and articles ("rural areas"; "helps me relax").

예시: I prefer rural areas because the wide open landscapes and greenery help me feel calm. For example, spending a week looking over fields and distant hills helps me relax and reconnect with nature.

제안: Make a clear, concise statement and support it with one or two specific examples. Correct repetition and word choice ("most of the most", "rug" -> "rugged"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example" and avoid overstretching sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I've already visited many scenic spots at home. For example, I'd love to see dramatic coastal cliffs and rugged mountain landscapes abroad to experience different types of terrain and local atmospheres.

× I like composing shots, I experiment them while with different angles and compositions to capture landscapes and I keep those memories to for years to come.

✓ I like composing shots; I experiment with different angles and compositions to capture landscapes, and I keep those memories for years to come.

Errors: incorrect object for 'experiment' (should be 'experiment with'), extraneous 'them', misplaced 'while', unnecessary preposition 'to' before 'for years'. Suggestion: Use 'experiment with' + noun, link independent clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction, and use 'for years to come' without 'to'.

× I prefer rural area because wide open landscapes, landscapes and greenery.

✓ I prefer rural areas because of the wide open landscapes and greenery.

Errors: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general preference; missing preposition 'of' after 'because'; duplicated word 'landscapes'. Suggestion: Use plural for general categories and include 'of' after 'because' when followed by a noun phrase describing reason.

× Big UH gives me peace and helps reduce my stress.

✓ Big urban areas give me peace and help reduce my stress.

Errors: 'Big UH' appears to be filler/hesitation and unclear; subject-verb mismatch if 'Big' intended singular; better to say 'Big urban areas' and use plural verbs 'give' and 'help' to agree. Suggestion: Avoid filler sounds in speaking transcripts and ensure subject and verbs agree in number.

× For example, spending a week looking over field and distances help me relaxes and reconnect it with the nature.

✓ For example, spending a week looking over fields and distances helps me relax and reconnect with nature.

Errors: 'field' should be plural 'fields'; missing plural agreement causes verb error (helps). 'Relaxes' incorrect form for subject 'spending a week' (use 'helps me relax'). 'Reconnect it with the nature' incorrect pronoun and article — use 'reconnect with nature'. Suggestion: Ensure noun number consistency, match verb to gerund subject, and omit unnecessary articles and pronouns.

× I prefer views in another country because I have already explored most of the most of the scenic spots in my own country.

✓ I prefer views in another country because I have already explored most of the scenic spots in my own country.

Errors: Repetition 'most of the most of' — remove duplicate. Suggestion: Proofread for repeated phrases.

× I would love to see dramatic coastal cliffs and rug mountains landscape abroad to experience different types of nature and coastal regions and the smell of the soil there.

✓ I would love to see dramatic coastal cliffs and rugged mountain landscapes abroad to experience different types of nature and coastal regions and to enjoy the smell of the soil there.

Errors: 'rug' should be adjective 'rugged'; 'mountains landscape' incorrect order and number — use 'mountain landscapes' or 'mountain landscape'. Also missing parallel structure and 'to enjoy' clarifies intent. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms (rugged), correct noun phrases (mountain landscapes), and keep parallel infinitive forms for clarity.