Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to organize reasons. Improve grammar (articles, verb forms, plural/singular) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “memories,” “capture,” “scenery,” “activities”). Aim for 2–3 sentences: one main idea and one supporting detail with an example.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memories of places I’ve visited. For example, a photo of a mountain sunrise reminds me of the fresh air, the colors of the sky, and the calm I felt that morning.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then provide two specific supporting points with linking words. Correct grammar (use plural/singular and finer phrasing) and avoid vague phrases like “sometimes it is.” Use vocabulary contrasting urban and rural features (e.g., “crowded,” “quiet,” “pace of life”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and show how people live at a slower pace. For instance, in the countryside I can photograph farmers working in fields and peaceful landscapes, while cities often feel crowded and noisy.

제안: Provide one clear main sentence and one specific supporting detail or example. Fix grammar and incomplete sentence. Use precise descriptors (e.g., “scenery,” “landscapes,” “local culture”) and explain why your hometown is special with a concrete example. Keep responses natural and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer views in my own country, particularly my hometown, because the local landscapes and traditions feel familiar and comforting. For example, the riverside in my town has willow trees and small boats that create a peaceful scene I love to photograph.

× Yes I do because I think that taking pictures is not just a simple photo but it can help me to keep as a memories photos and reminds me of the place that I have visited and reminds how beautiful the places, what of the activities there.

✓ Yes, I do, because I think that taking pictures is not just simple photos; they can help me keep memories and remind me of the places I have visited and how beautiful they were and what activities I did there.

Errors involve incorrect noun forms, pluralization, and verbs following gerunds. 'Taking pictures is not just a simple photo' mixes singular/plural and form; change to 'not just simple photos'. 'Help me to keep as a memories photos' is incorrect order and articles; use 'help me keep memories'. 'Reminds me of the place that I have visited and reminds how beautiful the places, what of the activities there' repeats 'reminds' awkwardly and has wrong relative clause and word order; use 'remind me of the places I have visited and how beautiful they were and what activities I did there'. Suggestions: simplify clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement (they can help/remind), use correct plural nouns (photos, memories), and correct word order in relative clauses.

× I do prefer views in rural area because I think in rural area it helps me to learn how the people live there, how peaceful it is and like a slowly life, don't be in a rush.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I think rural areas help me learn how people live there, how peaceful it is, and how life is slower and less rushed.

Errors: incorrect preposition/article use 'in rural area' should be 'in rural areas' or 'in the rural area'; unnecessary repetition. 'Like a slowly life' uses wrong form; correct is 'life is slower' or 'a slower life'. 'Don't be in a rush' is a fragment and colloquial; use 'less rushed'. Suggestions: use plural or add the article 'the' for singular, use comparative adjective 'slower' not adverb 'slowly', and make clauses parallel and grammatically complete.

× And in urban areas I think it's really crowded and sometimes it is.

✓ And in urban areas I think it's really crowded sometimes.

Redundant 'and sometimes it is' repeats the idea; also 'it's really crowded and sometimes it is' is awkward. Simplify to 'it's really crowded sometimes.' Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition and keep subject-verb agreement concise.

× Oh, I do prefer views in my own country, especially in my hometown. It's such a significant areas.

✓ Oh, I do prefer views in my own country, especially in my hometown. It's such a significant area.

'Such a significant areas' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'areas'. Use singular 'area' with 'a' or plural without 'a' (e.g., 'such significant areas'). Suggestion: match article with noun number.

× The atmosphere, the views there, the nature, everything is so beautiful and peaceful there.

✓ The atmosphere, the views, and the nature there are all so beautiful and peaceful.

Original lists multiple subjects but uses singular verb 'is', causing a subject-verb agreement/structure issue. Use plural verb 'are' and parallel structure: 'The atmosphere, the views, and the nature there are all so beautiful and peaceful.' Suggestion: ensure compound subjects take plural verbs and keep parallel punctuation.

× I feel like it's something I can.

✓ I feel like it's something I can enjoy and appreciate.

Sentence ends abruptly with 'I can' missing the verb; this is a sentence structure/fragment error. Provide a suitable verb or verb phrase to complete the meaning, e.g., 'enjoy and appreciate.' Suggestion: always include the main verb to complete the clause.