Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Улучшите связность и грамматику. Ответ сейчас содержит ошибки времени и конструкции (например, «take my phone to photography something», «if I'll tell you the truth», незавершённое окончание). Дайте чёткое вступительное предложение, затем одно-два предложения с причинами или примером, используя связки (because, so, however). Используйте простые правильные структуры времен и завершайте мысль. Постарайтесь уложиться в 3–4 предложения и избегать повторов («really», «usually").

예시: I don't usually take pictures of views because I feel self-conscious using my phone in public. However, when I see something especially beautiful, I sometimes take a quick photo so I can remember it later. For example, last month I photographed a sunset from a hilltop because the colors were striking.

제안: Сделайте ответ более конкретным и логичным. Сейчас вы говорите об обеих средах, но форма «both both type of use» некорректна, и рассуждение об общем благополучии слишком общее. Начните с прямого ответа (I prefer both, but...), затем приведите одно конкретное сравнение или пример, используя связку (because, for example, while). Избегайте религиозных обобщений, если они не связаны с вопросом, и используйте точную лексику (urban, rural, countryside).

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because each has different attractions. For example, urban areas offer interesting architecture and lively streets, while rural areas have peaceful landscapes and fresh air. So I enjoy visiting both depending on my mood.

제안: Сформулируйте ответ чётко и грамматически правильно. В текущем варианте есть ошибки времени и конструкции («I live here since my childhood I did attract»). Сначала прямо ответьте (I prefer views in my own country), затем объясните причину (familiarity, memories) и при необходимости добавьте контраст с зарубежными видами. Используйте связки (because, since, although) и проверьте порядок слов.

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because I have many memories attached to the places I grew up in. Since childhood I have explored local landscapes, so they feel more familiar and meaningful to me. Although I enjoyed visiting Turkey, my home scenery still feels more special.

× I feel awkward when I take my phone to photography something and that's why I usually don't take any pictures outside.

✓ I feel awkward when I take my phone to take photographs of something, and that's why I usually don't take any pictures outside.

The verb 'photography' is a noun; after 'to' you need the base verb form 'take' or use the gerund 'photographing'. Also 'to take my phone to photography something' is ungrammatical in English. Use 'take photographs of' or 'photograph'. Suggestion: say 'take my phone to photograph something' or 'take my phone to take photographs of something.'

× But really, if I'll tell you the truth, I think I would like to take a picture if I.

✓ But really, to tell you the truth, I think I would like to take a picture sometimes.

Conditional and future forms are misused. 'If I'll tell you the truth' is wrong; English uses 'to tell you the truth' or 'if I tell you the truth'. The fragment 'if I.' is incomplete. Suggestion: use complete clause and correct conditional: 'If I told you the truth...' or simply 'to tell you the truth.'

× I prefer both both type of use.

✓ I prefer both types of places.

'Both both type of use' contains repetition and incorrect singular 'type' for two items. Use the plural 'types' and a clearer noun; 'places' fits context (urban and rural).

× I think everything in the world is beautiful because it was created by God and whatever is here is here for some reason.

✓ I think everything in the world is beautiful because it was created by God, and everything here exists for a reason.

Awkward repetition 'whatever is here is here' and tense/word choice issues. Replace repetitive clause with concise expression 'everything here exists for a reason.' This improves clarity and style.

× I prefer my country's views more than others 'cause I live here since my childhood I did attract.

✓ I prefer my country's views more than those of other countries because I have lived here since my childhood and I am attached to them.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'I live here since my childhood' should be present perfect 'I have lived here since my childhood'. 'I did attract' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'I am attached' or 'I was attracted'. Use 'attached to them' to show emotional connection. Also 'others' should be 'those of other countries'.