Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Remove repetition, make the main idea clearer, add a linking word and one specific detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. Pronunciation/naturalness: avoid repeating words and use a more natural verb collocation (e.g., "capturing natural scenes").

예시: Yes, I love photographing different views because I enjoy capturing natural scenes. For example, in Pakistan the northern areas have breathtaking mountains and valleys, so I often take photos there when I visit. I also try to photograph at different times of day to catch changing light.

제안: Correct word choice, grammar and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details and a brief comparison. Fix common errors: 'Rother'→'rural', 'piece'→'peace', and comparative form 'more relaxing'.

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy the peace, fresh air and wide open landscapes. For example, when I visit the countryside near my town, I like walking through green fields and photographing wide views; it feels much more relaxing than the crowded city.

제안: Provide a clearer topic sentence and add a linking phrase to explain why, with one specific comparison. Avoid small grammatical slips (e.g., 'places like Switzerland have' → 'places such as Switzerland have'). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because places such as Switzerland offer landscapes I don't usually see at home. For example, the combination of high mountains, clear lakes and pristine air creates dramatic scenery that I find more striking than the views near my town.

× I love photographing different views because because I enjoy capturing naturally.

✓ I love photographing different views because I enjoy capturing them naturally.

The verb 'capture' when referring to objects requires an object; use 'capturing them' to refer back to 'different views'. Also remove the duplicate 'because'. 'Capturing naturally' is awkward; 'capturing them naturally' places '-ing' form correctly with its object.

× I love photographing different views because because I enjoy capturing naturally.

✓ I love photographing different views because I enjoy capturing them naturally.

No article was strictly required here, but the duplicate 'because' is an error and the noun 'views' requires a pronoun reference 'them'. Clarify the sentence by supplying the pronoun rather than an article.

× I prefer Rother areas because I enjoy the piece fresh air and wide open landscapes.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I enjoy the fresh, peaceful air and wide open landscapes.

'Rother' is likely a misspelling of 'rural'. 'Piece fresh air' is incorrect: use 'the' with a specific noun phrase and correct adjectives: 'the fresh, peaceful air'. Article 'the' is needed before the specific air being described.

× I prefer Rother areas because I enjoy the piece fresh air and wide open landscapes.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I enjoy the fresh, peaceful air and wide open landscapes.

Adjective order and choice were wrong. Use 'fresh, peaceful air' or 'peaceful, fresh air' and ensure adjectives are correctly spelled. 'Piece' should be 'peaceful' or 'peace' depending on intended meaning.

× For example, when I visit the countryside near my town, the green fields and clear sky make it much relaxing than crowded city.

✓ For example, when I visit the countryside near my town, the green fields and clear skies make it much more relaxing than the crowded city.

Compare two things correctly: use 'more relaxing than' for comparative form. 'Clear sky' should be plural 'clear skies' to match 'fields'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'crowded city' to specify it.

× The mountains, lakes and clean air make the landscape much more impressive than the ones I usually see at home.

✓ The mountains, lakes, and clean air make the landscape much more impressive than what I usually see at home.

Use 'what' or 'those' rather than 'the ones' because 'landscape' is singular and 'the ones' refers to plural noun; 'what I usually see' sounds natural. Also add a serial comma for clarity.

× The mountains, lakes and clean air make the landscape much more impressive than the ones I usually see at home.

✓ The mountains, lakes, and clean air make the landscape much more impressive than what I usually see at home.

Although 'make' is correct for plural subject, 'the ones' mismatches with singular 'landscape'. Replacing with 'what' fixes agreement and reference.