Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words, and correct plural and article errors (e.g., 'pictures', 'on a trip', 'the food').

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they remind me of places I've visited. For example, on holidays I often photograph landmarks and city streets, and later I review these photos when I have free time.

제안: Make your preference clear in one sentence, then give a specific reason using linking words. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'urban areas', 'go to a hill or forest', 'social context' -> 'being around people'). Avoid hesitations and vague phrases.

예시: I prefer urban areas. Because I enjoy being around people, I usually choose cities when I travel since they offer lively streets, cafes, and cultural events.

제안: Give a concise reason and one supporting specific example. Avoid repetition and fillers like 'I think' repeated, and combine ideas into a smooth two-sentence response with linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I like seeing new places and cultures. For example, during my exchange in Canada I enjoyed discovering different cityscapes and landscapes that I never see at home.

× I love taking picture of everything.

✓ I love taking pictures of everything.

Use the gerund 'taking' correctly with the plural countable noun 'pictures'. The original used singular 'picture' which is incorrect when referring to multiple items. Suggestion: use 'pictures' after 'taking'.

× Whenever I go to a trip, I always take picture of everything.

✓ Whenever I go on a trip, I always take pictures of everything.

Two issues: preposition and plural noun with gerund. The correct preposition is 'on a trip' not 'to a trip' (preposition error). Also use plural 'pictures' when talking about many photos. Suggestion: 'go on a trip' and 'take pictures'.

× Of a monument, of a street, of of the of the food, of me.

✓ Of a monument, of a street, of the food, of me.

Remove duplicated words and use the definite article correctly for 'the food'. The phrase had repeated 'of' and 'the' causing ungrammatical sequence. Suggestion: list items cleanly: 'of a monument, of a street, of the food, of me.'

× But I prefer to take picture of the view because, yeah, I love to review them whenever I don't have anything to do.

✓ But I prefer to take pictures of the view because, yeah, I love to review them whenever I don't have anything to do.

Use plural 'pictures' with 'take'. 'Take picture' is ungrammatical when referring generally. Suggestion: 'take pictures of the view'.

× I totally prefer the urban areas because whenever I travel I always choose the cities instead of maybe to go to an hill forest because I prefer like staying in social context instead of, I don't know, natural contest or maybe with some like be alone I prefer to stay with people.

✓ I totally prefer urban areas because whenever I travel I always choose cities instead of going to a hill forest, because I prefer staying in a social context instead of, I don't know, a natural setting or being alone; I prefer to stay with people.

Multiple errors: omit 'the' before general plural nouns like 'urban areas' and 'cities', use gerund 'going to' not 'to go to', use 'a hill forest' -> better 'a hill forest' or 'a forested hill' (kept 'a hill forest'), 'staying in a social context' needs indefinite article 'a', 'natural contest' is incorrect word 'setting' fits, 'with some like be alone' should be 'being alone'. Suggestions: simplify and use correct prepositions/articles and gerunds.

× And because I think, I think that I I prefer the other countries because I used to see my country every single day, so I always like something new, yeah.

✓ And because I think that I prefer other countries because I see my country every single day, so I always like something new.

Remove duplicate 'I', and avoid unnecessary 'the' before 'other countries' when speaking generally. 'I used to see my country every single day' implies past habitual action; context needs present 'I see' to indicate current repeated exposure. Suggestion: use 'I see my country every single day' or 'I see my hometown every day' and remove fillers for clarity.