Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and naturalness, be concise, and add a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography makes me happy. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets which help me relax after a busy day, and I like experimenting with composition to capture the mood.

제안: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), be more specific and use linking words. Start with a clear preference sentence, then give one concrete example and a brief reason. Keep within five sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas because their peaceful scenery helps me unwind. For instance, when I sat on a mountainside last summer, the fresh air and wide views made me feel calm and restored.

제안: Avoid repetition and vague phrasing; make a direct statement then support it with a specific reason or example. Use comparative language correctly and limit to a couple of concise sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I know the landscapes and cultural scenes better. For example, I love photographing the traditional rice terraces at sunrise, which remind me of home and are hard to find elsewhere.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because it feels me happy.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because it makes me happy.

The verb 'feel' here is used with a pronoun as object; English uses 'make someone + adjective' or 'feel + adjective' without an extra object. 'It feels me happy' is incorrect. Use 'it makes me happy' or 'I feel happy'. Suggestion: say 'it makes me happy' or 'it makes me feel happy.'

× Seeing a scenic beauty of each places makes me feel relaxed.

✓ Seeing the scenic beauty of each place makes me feel relaxed.

'A scenic beauty' is unnatural; use 'the scenic beauty' when referring to a specific quality. 'Each places' mixes 'each' (which requires singular) with plural 'places'. Use 'each place' (singular) or 'places' alone. Suggestion: use 'the scenic beauty of each place' or 'the scenic beauty of different places.'

× For me both areas has its own beauty but I prefer the rural areas because it gives me a scenic beauty where I can feel relaxed.

✓ For me, both areas have their own beauty, but I prefer rural areas because they give me a scenic setting where I can feel relaxed.

'Both areas' is plural and requires 'have' not 'has'. 'Its' is singular; with 'both areas' use 'their'. Also 'the rural areas' can be plural without 'the' or use 'rural areas' generalised. 'It gives me a scenic beauty' is awkward; use 'they give me a scenic setting' or 'they are scenic and help me relax.' Suggestion: ensure plural subjects use plural verbs and plural pronouns.

× Example is when I was sitting in a view of mountain, I feel relaxed and calm.

✓ For example, when I was sitting with a view of the mountain, I felt relaxed and calm.

Sentence mixes past ('was sitting') with present 'I feel'. Keep tense consistent: use past 'I felt' to match 'was sitting'. Also word order: 'sitting in a view of mountain' is incorrect; use 'sitting with a view of the mountain' or 'sitting on a mountainside with a view.' Include article 'the' before 'mountain' if a specific mountain is meant. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent and correct prepositional phrases.

× For me, I prefer the view of my own country compared to other country because I believe that my country has its own beauty compared to other countries.

✓ For me, I prefer the views of my own country compared to other countries because I believe my country has its own beauty.

Use plural 'views' or 'the view... compared to other countries' requires 'countries' plural. 'Other country' (singular) is incorrect when comparing to multiple other countries. Also 'compared to other countries' at end is redundant after saying preference; simplify. Suggestion: use consistent singular/plural and avoid repetition.

× That's why I chose my own country.

✓ That's why I choose my own country.

The examiner asked a general preference; use present simple 'I choose' (or better 'I choose my own country' or 'I prefer my own country') rather than past 'I chose' which implies a one-time decision in the past. Suggestion: use present tense for general preferences: 'I choose' or 'I prefer.'