Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and give a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words like “uh” and “umm.” Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I see beautiful landscapes near my home every day. For example, there is a river valley close by where the sunrise creates lovely colours, so I often photograph it to capture the moment.

제안: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give two specific reasons connected with linking words. Remove repetitions and filler sounds. Mention a concrete detail (a particular landscape, sound, or feeling) to make the answer more vivid.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they offer peaceful natural scenery and cleaner air. For instance, I enjoy hiking in wooded hills where I can hear birds and see wide open fields, which helps me relax and take better photos.

제안: Give a clear, concise preference and then support it with a specific reason and one short example. Correct grammar (e.g., "I like to travel abroad" not "I like travel abroad all my life") and avoid absolute claims; be precise about what you find more attractive abroad.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different landscapes and cultures. For example, when I visited Japan I was impressed by the contrast between traditional gardens and modern cityscapes, which felt very different from the scenery at home.

× Student: Well, umm, I think I like uh, because uh, uh, I uh, see beautiful places every day, beautiful landscapes and uh, I would like to take a photo with them, so I do.

✓ Student: Well, umm, I think I like it because I see beautiful places every day, beautiful landscapes, and I would like to take photos of them, so I do.

Errors: missing object after 'like' and incorrect verb phrase 'take a photo with them'. Use 'like it' to refer to the activity and 'take photos of them' to mean photographing places. Also pluralize 'photos' to match repeated instances. Suggestion: include appropriate object pronoun or noun after 'like' and use 'take photos of' for photographing subjects. ID: 8

× Student: Personally, I prefer rural areas, uh, the most, uh, because, uh, there are a lot of, uh, beautiful landscapes and, uh, I like, uh, the environment. So be, uh, face to face with, uh, nature and uh, I prefer rural areas.

✓ Student: Personally, I prefer rural areas the most because there are a lot of beautiful landscapes and I like the environment. I prefer to be face to face with nature, so I prefer rural areas.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'So be face to face with nature' and unnecessary commas/hesitations removed. Use infinitive 'to be' after 'prefer' in this structure: 'I prefer to be face to face with nature.' Also remove duplicate final clause or keep one for clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer... the most' without extra commas and correct infinitive form. ID: 22

× Student: I prefer views in another country because I like travel abroad all my life and there are a lot of beautiful views in my country too.

✓ Student: I prefer views in other countries because I have liked traveling abroad all my life, and there are a lot of beautiful views in my country too.

Errors: tense and verb form. The original 'I like travel abroad all my life' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'have liked' to express a life-long preference up to now, and use gerund 'traveling' as the object of 'like'. Also use 'other countries' (plural) to match general reference. Suggestion: use 'have liked' + gerund for ongoing life-long experiences. ID: 9

× Student: But in other countries they're most beautiful.

✓ Student: But in other countries they are more beautiful.

Errors: incorrect use of 'most' to form the comparative. For comparing two groups (views in my country vs other countries), use comparative 'more beautiful' rather than superlative 'most beautiful'. Also expand contraction to 'they are' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'more' + adjective for comparisons between two sets. ID: 25