Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), correct verb forms and word order, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, say what types of views you prefer and why, and mention where you keep your photos.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing mountains and interesting buildings because they have unique shapes and textures. For example, I often shoot modern architectural projects that show unusual designs, and I keep the best photos in a dedicated album on my phone.

제안: Clarify and correct sentence structure, remove vague phrases and first-person plural that confuses meaning ('we're artists'). Use linking words to connect reasons and give specific examples. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are cleaner and more peaceful. For instance, I like photographing quiet country lanes, mountain scenery, and well-tended gardens, which provide natural colors and calm atmospheres that I find inspiring.

제안: Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), use clearer vocabulary and structure. State preference directly, then give 2–3 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating 'new' and correct 'enthusiasm' to an adjective phrase ('more enthusiastic').

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer unique scenery and different architectural styles. For example, when I travel I enjoy discovering unfamiliar cityscapes and traditional buildings, which inspire me more than familiar local views.

× Yes I do, I love take pictures of different views like mountains, different building umm projects, architects umm for me like it's very different and very no random album of photos in my phone or my card.

✓ Yes I do. I love taking pictures of different views, like mountains, various buildings, architectural projects; for me it's very different, not just a random album of photos on my phone or memory card.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the -ing form (gerund) when indicating enjoyment of an activity. 'take' should be 'taking'. Also 'different building' needs plural or a modifier ('various buildings'), and 'my card' is clarified as 'memory card'. Punctuation and conjunctions were adjusted for clarity and natural flow.

× I prefer views in rural areas because we're artists, they are more clean views, more chill, is like a unique place, uh, clean weather and beautiful and beautiful mountains and gardening.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because, as an artist, I find them cleaner and more peaceful; they are unique places with fresh air, beautiful mountains, and gardens.

'We're artists' is awkward for a single speaker; changed to 'as an artist'. 'More clean' should be 'cleaner' (comparative adjective). 'More chill' is informal; 'more peaceful' fits better. 'Gardening' should be 'gardens' to refer to places. Sentence structure was corrected for agreement and clarity.

× I prefer views in another countries because in other countries I have everything unique, everything new.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I find everything there unique and new.

Use 'other countries' (plural) not 'another countries'. Also 'in other countries I have everything' is unnatural; 'I find everything there' is clearer. Preposition and article usage adjusted.

× The atmosphere, it's very different from a country.

✓ The atmosphere is very different from that in my country.

Sentence needed clearer comparison object: 'different from a country' is vague; use 'different from that in my country' to compare atmospheres properly. Removed unnecessary comma and pronoun redundancy.

× I'm more enthusiasm with the new views, new buildings and every architecture of different.

✓ I'm more enthusiastic about new views, new buildings, and different kinds of architecture.

'Enthusiasm' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'enthusiastic'. Use 'about' with 'enthusiastic'. 'Every architecture of different' is ungrammatical; replace with 'different kinds of architecture' for clarity.