Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and fix grammar errors (plural/singular, articles). Use a linking phrase if you add a reason.

예시: Not really. I don’t enjoy taking pictures because photography isn’t my hobby; instead, I prefer playing video games and football, which help me relax after a busy day.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details using correct grammar and linking words. Correct singular/plural and verb agreement. Avoid repeating phrases like "in my opinion" multiple times.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of green spaces. For example, the countryside near my town has quiet lanes and many trees, which makes it ideal for walking and relaxing.

제안: State your preference directly, correct repetition and grammar, and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and avoid repeating words.

예시: I prefer views in my own country, especially Hanoi, because it offers a mix of modern architecture and cultural landmarks. For example, the city's skyline and French-colonial buildings create interesting contrasts that I enjoy seeing.

× Well, to be honest, I'm not interested in taking picture because that is not my cup of tea.

✓ Well, to be honest, I'm not interested in taking pictures because that is not my cup of tea.

The count noun 'picture' requires plural 'pictures' after 'taking' when speaking generally. Also 'taking pictures' is the correct gerund phrase. Suggestion: use 'pictures' for general activities (take pictures).

× I prefer playing video games and playing football instead because it helps me reduce stress.

✓ I prefer playing video games and football instead because they help me reduce stress.

Parallel ideas should use the same structure and the pronoun must agree in number. 'Playing video games and football' are two activities, so use plural pronoun 'they' and avoid repeating 'playing'. Also 'help' matches plural subject. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and correct verb agreement.

× Well, in my opinion both the cities and the outskirts hold different benefits and I think that I prefer views in rural area because it is peaceful and also have a lot of trees.

✓ Well, in my opinion both the cities and the outskirts have different benefits and I think that I prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful and also have a lot of trees.

Use plural 'have' to agree with compound subject 'cities and outskirts'. 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'Views' (plural) require 'they are' rather than 'it is' and 'have' instead of 'has'. Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural verbs and pronouns.

× Well to be honest I prefer views in my own country which has Hanoi city in Vietnam because it like there are a lot of variety of modern modern views there especially in Hanoi.

✓ Well, to be honest I prefer views in my own country, which includes Hanoi in Vietnam, because there are a lot of different modern views there, especially in Hanoi.

Sentence structure and conjunctions are awkward. 'Which has Hanoi city' should be 'which includes Hanoi' or 'which has Hanoi'. 'Because it like there are' is incorrect; use 'because there are'. 'A lot of variety of' is redundant; use 'a lot of different' or 'a wide variety of'. Remove duplicate 'modern'. Suggestion: simplify relative clause and use 'there are' for existence plus correct quantifier phrase.