Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("capture every moment" repeated), correct phrasing (e.g., "whatever I saw" → "whatever I see"), and use linking words to add one specific supporting detail. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views. I use my smartphone and a digital camera to capture landscapes and city scenes, because each device suits different lighting and zoom needs.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid vague words like "fields" when you mean "views"; correct grammar ("I was born and grew up here"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use specific examples of what you like about urban views.

예시: I prefer urban views. Because I was born and raised here, I know interesting streets, rooftops and skyline viewpoints where I can take dramatic photos.

제안: Answer directly and give two concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "Firstly", "Also"). Correct word choice: use "views" rather than "feels" and grammar: "I'm more familiar with my country's views". Mention a clear example and finish the sentence cleanly.

예시: I prefer views in my own country. Firstly, I'm more familiar with the best locations and seasons for photography; also, iconic spots like Victoria Harbour offer unique skyline shots I know how to capture.

× I love taking pictures, whatever I saw and I would use different devices to film, to capture every moment.

✓ I love taking pictures of whatever I see, and I use different devices to film and capture every moment.

The original sentence mixes past tense 'saw' with a general habit; use present simple 'see' for habitual actions. Also 'whatever I saw' should be 'whatever I see'. 'Would use' implies conditional; use 'use' to state a habitual action. Remove extra commas and streamline verbs 'film and capture'. Suggestions: use present simple for habits and keep parallel verb forms.

× I want to save down, for example my phone, also camera and there is a film camera I got to record every moment.

✓ I want to save them, for example on my phone and camera, and I also have a film camera to record every moment.

The phrase 'save down' is incorrect; use 'save them' or 'save them on'. Use preposition 'on' with devices. 'Also camera' lacks article and coordination—use 'my phone and camera' or 'my phone and my camera'. 'There is a film camera I got' should be 'I also have a film camera' for clarity and correct verb use. Suggestions: use 'on' for storing files on devices and maintain parallel structure.

× Actually I prefer both fields.

✓ Actually, I prefer both places.

'Fields' is too specific and may be incorrect in context; the question asks about 'urban areas or rural areas' so 'places' or 'both' is better. If 'fields' is intended to mean 'areas', use plural 'areas' or 'places'. Suggestions: choose vocabulary matching context and use plural nouns when appropriate.

× They are. They all have different features and both are stunning.

✓ They both have different features, and both are stunning.

The fragment 'They are.' is incomplete. Combine sentences for clarity: 'They both have different features' expresses the idea and avoids sentence fragments. Suggestions: avoid sentence fragments; combine related clauses.

× But personally I maybe prefer urban areas more than the rural because I'm more familiar in the urban area as I'm born and grow here so I could easily capture every field I want to.

✓ But personally I prefer urban areas more than rural ones because I'm more familiar with urban areas; I was born and raised here, so I can easily capture the scenes I want.

'Maybe prefer' is awkward; use 'prefer'. 'The rural' should be 'rural ones' or 'rural areas'. Use 'familiar with' not 'familiar in'. 'I'm born and grow here' is incorrect tense and form; change to past passive/active 'I was born and raised here'. 'Could easily capture every field I want to' should be 'can easily capture the scenes I want'—'could' implies conditional, 'can' for ability; 'field' is wrong noun choice. Suggestions: use correct preposition 'familiar with', correct tense for past events, and choose accurate nouns.

× To be honest, I prefer feels in my own country other than other countries.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the feeling of my own country to that of other countries.

Using 'feels' as a noun is incorrect; use 'feeling'. 'Prefer ... other than other countries' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer X over Y'. Match noun phrases: 'the feeling of my own country' and 'that of other countries'. Suggestions: use 'prefer A to B' structure and use 'feeling' as noun here.

× Firstly it's because I'm kinda more familiar to my country's feel like I know where to visit when I am down and also there is a signature field of Victoria Harbour in my own country so.

✓ Firstly, it's because I'm more familiar with my country's atmosphere; I know where to visit when I go there, and my country also has a landmark, Victoria Harbour.

'Familiar to' should be 'familiar with'. 'Country's feel' is awkward; use 'atmosphere' or 'places'. 'When I am down' is unclear—use 'when I go there'. 'Signature field of Victoria Harbour' is incorrect; use 'a landmark, Victoria Harbour' or 'the famous Victoria Harbour'. Remove trailing 'so'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions, clearer nouns (atmosphere/landmark), and appropriate verb phrases for visiting.