School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure. For example, say "My school is located in Anakapalli district..." Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Keep your answer concise and clear.

예시: My school is located in Anakapalli district, a small town near Visakhapatnam city in Andhra Pradesh. I like it because it holds many memories, such as attending classes, playing with friends, and learning new things.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, use "because" and "and" properly to explain your reasons.

예시: Yes, I like my school because it holds many memories. Moreover, I grew physically, emotionally, and intellectually there, which helped me become a better person.

제안: Avoid repeating the same information. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, instead of repeating about scholarships, mention it once clearly.

예시: Yes, definitely. My school offers various programs, including academics, sports, and cultural activities, so students can pursue their interests and develop holistically. Additionally, it provides many scholarships to support students.

제안: Use precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of "quiet and vague," use "quiet and peaceful." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: My school is located on the outskirts of town, surrounded by a quiet and peaceful environment. This calm atmosphere helps students concentrate better during classes.

제안: Make your sentences clearer and more complete. Use linking words like "because" and "and" properly. Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your ideas.

예시: I believe interest in study is very important because it helps a person gain knowledge and develop both personally and intellectually.

× My school located in Anakapalli district, a small town near Visakhapatnam city in the state of Andhra Pradesh.

✓ My school is located in Anakapalli district, a small town near Visakhapatnam city in the state of Andhra Pradesh.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to form the correct present tense structure 'is located'. Without the verb, the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect. Adding 'is' corrects the sentence structure.

× it holds lot of memories for me

✓ it holds a lot of memories for me

The phrase 'lot of' requires the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct. 'A lot of' is the correct quantifier to express a large amount or number.

× I shaped into a better person there the I grew, I grew up physically, emotionally, intellectually there it helps me to shape me to a better person.

✓ I was shaped into a better person there as I grew up physically, emotionally, and intellectually; it helped me become a better person.

The original sentence is run-on and lacks proper verb forms and connectors. 'I shaped' should be passive 'I was shaped' to indicate transformation. 'The I grew' is incorrect; it should be 'as I grew up'. Also, 'it helps me to shape me' is redundant and incorrect; 'it helped me become' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× it holds lot of memories for me

✓ it holds a lot of memories for me

The phrase 'lot of' requires the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct. 'A lot of' is the correct quantifier to express a large amount or number.

× My school is surrounded with a quiet and vague environment

✓ My school is surrounded by a quiet and vague environment

The correct preposition after 'surrounded' is 'by', not 'with'. 'Surrounded by' indicates what is around something.

× My school is surrounded with a quiet and vague environment

✓ My school is surrounded by a quiet and calm environment

The adjective 'vague' is inappropriate to describe an environment. 'Calm' or 'peaceful' better describes a quiet environment suitable for study.

× so it helps students do more concentrate on classes

✓ so it helps students concentrate more on classes

The verb 'concentrate' does not require 'do' before it. Also, the adverb 'more' should come after the verb 'concentrate' for correct adverb placement.

× I believe study makes a person better because it not only shapes us into a better person, also the knowledge provided the knowledge we get from studying something will develop a person into.

✓ I believe studying makes a person better because it not only shapes us into better individuals, but also the knowledge we gain from studying helps develop a person.

The sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'Study' should be 'studying' to function as a gerund subject. The phrase 'also the knowledge provided the knowledge we get from studying something will develop a person into' is unclear and redundant. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.