School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，句子结构不完整，且信息表达不够自然流畅。建议注意句子完整性，避免断句，使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: My school is located in Dalian, a city in the southeast of China. Dalian University is well known for its beautiful campus and excellent teachers.

제안: 回答中存在断句和语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议使用完整句子，注意时态一致，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I like my school very much because it provides me with good opportunities to learn professional technology and career skills. Moreover, I have developed close bonds with my classmates there.

제안: 语法错误较多，如主谓不一致，词汇使用不当。建议注意主谓一致，使用正确的词汇和表达方式，句子结构应更清晰。

예시: Absolutely. My school has two libraries that can accommodate thousands of students. They provide a quiet and comfortable environment for both students and professors to study and communicate.

제안: 句子结构混乱，表达不清晰，语法错误明显。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法结构，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: Our school is located by the seaside and near a mountain. The beautiful scenery helps to refresh our minds after a busy day. I am deeply attracted by the natural environment there.

제안: 表达基本清楚，但用词和句式较为简单，且有语法错误。建议丰富词汇，注意语法准确性，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: Firstly, having interest in study helps students achieve good grades because they can concentrate better in class. More importantly, it motivates them to explore the subject further.

× The area in the southeast of China is named.

✓ It is located in the southeast area of China.

原句结构不完整，缺少主语，导致句子不通顺。应补充主语，使句子完整。

× And well known teachers.

✓ It has well-known teachers.

句子缺少主语和谓语，导致不完整。应补充完整句子结构。

× I like my school so much since it provided me a good opportunity to learn professional technology and.

✓ I like my school so much since it provides me a good opportunity to learn professional technology and career skills.

句子中断，且时态不一致。根据上下文，使用现在时态更合适，且补全句子。

× Career skills.

✓ career skills.

该句为片段，应与前句合并，形成完整句子。

× More importantly, I bond with my classmates closer in their school.

✓ More importantly, I have bonded more closely with my classmates at school.

动词时态和副词位置错误，且介词使用不当。应使用完成时态，副词放在动词后，介词用at。

× since it have two library which can obtain over thousands of students,

✓ since it has two libraries which can accommodate over thousands of students,

主语it为单数，谓语动词应为has；library应为复数libraries；动词obtain用错，应为accommodate。

× it offers a quiet and comfortable environment for students and professors to study and communicate.

✓ it offers a quiet and comfortable environment for students and professors to study and communicate with each other.

动词communicate后应加介词with，表示相互交流。

× Our school is a seaside school and behind a mountain which has a beautiful scenery can nourish our senses after a busy day.

✓ Our school is a seaside school located behind a mountain, which has beautiful scenery that can nourish our senses after a busy day.

句子结构混乱，缺少连接词和定语从句的正确使用，导致表达不清。

× I deeply appealed by the scenery there.

✓ I am deeply attracted by the scenery there.

appealed用法错误，应使用被动语态的attracted，表示被吸引。

× Firstly, the interest can help people to get good grades in this course, which means they can focus on the knowledge in the class.

✓ Firstly, interest can help people get good grades in this course, which means they can focus on the knowledge in class.

the interest不合适，interest作为不可数名词不加冠词；focus on the knowledge in the class中the不必要。

× More importantly, it can also encourage them to study more further.

✓ More importantly, it can also encourage them to study further.

more further是重复比较，应去掉more，只用further。