School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho câu trả lời không tự nhiên và khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp lại thông tin không cần thiết. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, mạch lạc và đúng ngữ pháp.

예시: My school is located on Yujin Street in Lakewood City. It is quite far from my home, so I usually take the school bus to get there.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để kết nối các ý một cách mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I like my school because it offers many opportunities to make friends and gain knowledge. Moreover, I feel like it is my second home, where I have gained valuable experiences.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên luyện tập cách sử dụng thì đúng, tránh lặp từ và nói rõ ràng hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I believe my school is one of the best places to study because it provides excellent facilities and many educational experiences for students.

제안: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác như "there are not pollution" và nói câu rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để kết nối ý, giúp câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: The environment at my school is fresh and clean. There is no pollution because we are all aware of protecting the environment.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên luyện tập cách sử dụng mạo từ, thì và cấu trúc câu đúng. Ngoài ra, hãy nói ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

예시: Having an interest in studying is very important because it motivates you to work hard and complete your homework and assignments, which helps you succeed in life.

× Maybe so far away from my home and some and I always have to go by school bus because it is so far.

✓ Maybe it is so far away from my home and sometimes I always have to go by school bus because it is so far.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'Maybe' which is necessary to form a correct 'there be' structure indicating existence or state. Also, 'some' is unclear and should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× Yes, of course school is a place that gives me a lots of opportunities to have more relationship and can give me a lot of knowledge.

✓ Yes, of course school is a place that gives me lots of opportunities to have more relationships and can give me a lot of knowledge.

'a lots of' is incorrect; the correct form is 'lots of' without 'a'. Also, 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match 'more' indicating multiple relationships.

× Also school like a second home with me and I think that's, uh, give me a lot of experience.

✓ Also, school is like a second home to me and I think that it gives me a lot of experience.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' when expressing similarity or metaphorical comparison. Also, the verb 'like' needs 'is' to form the correct sentence, and 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject.

× Well, I always think that my school is one of the best place to educate people because umm, my school provide a faci uh, more than facilities for student and also they also and also they give up a lot of umm experience in education.

✓ Well, I always think that my school is one of the best places to educate people because, umm, my school provides more than facilities for students and also they give a lot of experience in education.

'place' should be plural 'places' after 'one of the'. 'provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'my school'. 'student' should be plural 'students' to match the context. 'give up' is incorrect here; 'give' is sufficient.

× Well, as my school, the environment is so fresh and clean. Umm, there are not pollution in my uh school because we also have awareness about uh environment and yeah.

✓ Well, at my school, the environment is so fresh and clean. Umm, there is no pollution in my school because we also have awareness about the environment and yeah.

'as my school' is incorrect preposition; 'at my school' is correct. 'there are not pollution' is incorrect; 'there is no pollution' is the correct form because 'pollution' is uncountable. Also, 'awareness about environment' needs the definite article 'the' before 'environment'.

× I think they have interest in study will give you motivation to achieve your goal because whenever you have a interest in study, it will give you opportunities to try hard to want to complete your homework, your assignment and yeah, that's will have you lots of in your life.

✓ I think having interest in study will give you motivation to achieve your goal because whenever you have an interest in study, it will give you opportunities to try hard and complete your homework, your assignments, and yeah, that will help you a lot in your life.

'they have interest' is incorrect pronoun usage; 'having interest' is better. 'a interest' should be 'an interest' because 'interest' starts with a vowel sound. 'try hard to want to complete' is awkward; 'try hard and complete' is clearer. 'that's will have you lots of' is incorrect; 'that will help you a lot' is correct. 'assignment' should be plural 'assignments' to match context.