School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ như thiếu mạo từ và cấu trúc câu chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới bổ sung chi tiết, đồng thời chú ý sử dụng mạo từ và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn.

예시: My school is Hanover City of Sciences, located in the heart of Tang Sun District. It is a convenient area with many cafes and a library nearby, which makes it a great place for studying.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như động từ chia sai ("it's have" nên là "it has"), và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và có liên kết rõ ràng giữa các ý.

예시: Yes, I love my school because it has excellent facilities and a well-designed curriculum that helps me learn effectively. Therefore, I believe I will have good job opportunities after graduation.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý cách dùng từ và cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "they facilitate, allow me to perform, experiment" có thể được diễn đạt mạch lạc hơn. Bạn cũng nên dùng liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

예시: Yes, I think my school is a great place to study because it has many well-equipped laboratories. For example, in my chemistry major, the labs allow me to perform experiments and understand chemical reactions better, which helps me learn more effectively.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng, ví dụ như "supportive will" không đúng và câu dài thiếu dấu câu. Bạn nên chia câu rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

예시: The environment at my school is very friendly and welcoming. Both teachers and students are supportive, which makes it easy to focus on learning. In addition, the classrooms are quiet and well-organized, creating a comfortable place to study.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn không trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi và có lỗi về từ vựng ("Christianity" không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp về tầm quan trọng của sự hứng thú trong học tập và giải thích rõ ràng hơn.

예시: I think having interest in study is very important because it motivates dedication and passion, which help students learn better and achieve their goals.

× It is a convenient area with many cafes and library nearby and making it a great place for studying.

✓ It is a convenient area with many cafes and libraries nearby, making it a great place for studying.

The noun 'library' should be plural 'libraries' to agree with 'many cafes' (plural). Also, the phrase 'and making it' should be connected properly with a comma to form a participial phrase describing the area.

× Yes, of course I love my school because it's have excellent facility and well design curriculum that help me learn effectively.

✓ Yes, of course I love my school because it has excellent facilities and a well-designed curriculum that helps me learn effectively.

The verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match the context. 'Well design' should be 'well-designed' as a compound adjective. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular 'curriculum'.

× For example, in my major chemistry, they facilitate, allow me to perform, experiment and understand chemical reaction better.

✓ For example, in my major chemistry, they facilitate and allow me to perform experiments and understand chemical reactions better.

The verbs 'facilitate' and 'allow' should be connected with 'and' without a comma. 'Experiment' should be plural 'experiments' to match the context. 'Chemical reaction' should be plural 'chemical reactions'.

× The environment is at my school is very friendly and welcoming, teachers and students are supportive will which make it easy to focus on learning and in addition the classroom are quiet and well organized, creating a comfortable place to study.

✓ The environment at my school is very friendly and welcoming; teachers and students are supportive, which makes it easy to focus on learning. In addition, the classrooms are quiet and well organized, creating a comfortable place to study.

The original sentence has redundant 'is' and run-on structure. 'Supportive will' is incorrect; 'which makes' is the correct relative clause. 'Classroom' should be plural 'classrooms'. Proper punctuation and sentence division improve clarity.

× I think the expected interest in study is dedication, passion, and Christianity.

✓ I think the essential interests in study are dedication, passion, and curiosity.

'Expected interest' is awkward; 'essential interests' fits better. 'Christianity' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'curiosity'. Also, 'interest' should be plural 'interests' to match the list.