School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中有较多的语气词和重复，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，句子结构更简洁自然，同时增加连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: My school is located in a small village in the countryside. Although it is not very big, it is surrounded by large trees, which creates a pleasant environment for studying and playing.

제안: 回答中存在重复和语气词，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

예시: I really loved my school and wish I could visit it again. Unfortunately, it was demolished after I graduated to make way for a shopping center.

제안: 回答中有重复和语气词，句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，减少重复，增加具体细节并使用连接词。

예시: Yes, I believe my school provided a great learning environment. It was beautiful, surrounded by tall trees, and had a well-stocked library where we could borrow interesting books after class.

제안: 回答较为自然，但存在重复和口语化表达。建议减少重复，使用更正式的表达，并增加更多具体细节。

예시: The environment at my school was very green and beautiful, surrounded by tall trees. On special occasions like Children's Day, flowers would be decorated around the campus, making it a pleasant place to study.

제안: 回答内容较好，但有重复和口语化表达。建议减少重复，使用更正式的语言，并用连接词使论述更连贯。

예시: I believe interest in study is very important. As the saying goes, 'Interest is the best teacher.' When you are genuinely interested in a subject, you tend to spend more time learning it, which often leads to better grades.

× but there, there, there are very big trees, uh, which means it has a great environment for us to play and study.

✓ but there were very big trees, uh, which meant it had a great environment for us to play and study.

这里描述的是过去的情况，使用现在时态的“are”和“has”不正确，应使用过去时态“were”和“had”。“There be issue”指的是“there is/are”结构时态错误。

× but it, it's impossible 'cause my school was turned, was, was turned down after I graduated.

✓ but it's impossible 'cause my school was torn down after I graduated.

“turned down”意思是拒绝，不符合语境，正确表达应为“torn down”（拆除）。同时，句中“was, was turned down”重复，应简化为“was torn down”。

× I heard that they, they just want to use the site. I use the school site to build a big shopping center.

✓ I heard that they just want to use the school site to build a big shopping center.

句子中“I use the school site”不合逻辑，应为“they want to use the school site”，去掉多余的“I use”。这是介词和句子结构使用错误。

× Yeah, I think my school offers us great environment to learn first it, it is beautiful, surrounded by large and tall trees.

✓ Yeah, I think my school offers us a great environment to learn. First, it is beautiful, surrounded by large and tall trees.

“great environment”前缺少冠词“a”，因为environment是可数名词单数形式。

× And also, you know, umm, the, the school has some great books. So after class we can go to library and and you know, borrow 1.

✓ And also, you know, umm, the school has some great books. So after class we can go to the library and, you know, borrow one.

“go to library”缺少定冠词“the”，应为“go to the library”。数字“1”应写为单词“one”。

× As I mentioned, the environment in my school is very is very green or beautiful.

✓ As I mentioned, the environment in my school is very green and beautiful.

句中重复“is very”，且“or”连接形容词不合适，应使用“and”连接两个形容词。

× It is surrounded by large tall trees and you know, sometimes there are flowers on special occasions like on Children's day.

✓ It is surrounded by large, tall trees and, you know, sometimes there are flowers on special occasions like Children's Day.

“Children's day”应大写为“Children's Day”，且“large tall trees”中间应加逗号分隔形容词。

× I think I think it is very important.

✓ I think it is very important.

句中重复“I think”，应去掉重复部分。

× You know, I remember that there was an old saying which goes like this study interest is the best teacher for study.

✓ You know, I remember that there was an old saying which goes like this: study interest is the best teacher for studying.

“study interest”应为“interest in study”或“interest in studying”，且“for study”应改为“for studying”，动名词形式更合适。

× So I think if you are really interested in something, you would like to spend more time to study and then you are more likely to get better grade.

✓ So I think if you are really interested in something, you would like to spend more time studying and then you are more likely to get better grades.

“spend more time to study”应改为“spend more time studying”，动名词形式；“better grade”应为复数“better grades”。