School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct sentence structures and avoiding redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and directly answer the question. For example, start with a clear topic sentence about the location, then add one or two supporting details using linking words.

예시: My school, THG Public School, is located just a stone's throw away from my hometown. It is well renowned not only in my city but also in the surrounding areas.

제안: Avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh'. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about the reasons you like your school.

예시: Yes, I love my school for several reasons. Firstly, it is well renowned in my city and nearby areas. Moreover, the school has highly qualified teachers who provide excellent education.

제안: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to connect your points and be specific about what makes your school a good place to study.

예시: Yes, definitely. My school is a great place to study because it has well-qualified teachers who are always available to support students and help them enhance their knowledge.

제안: Try to avoid repeating words and improve sentence coherence by using appropriate linking words. Be more specific about the environment and how teachers contribute to it.

예시: The study environment at my school is peaceful and serene. Additionally, teachers make it more engaging by offering extra classes and organizing interesting activities that enhance students' interest.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases like 'I think' and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and be specific about why interest is important in study.

예시: Interest in study is very important because when students are engaged, they can develop their ideas, gain knowledge effectively, and clear their doubts easily.

× Well my school which is known as THG public schools with stone throw away from my hometown.

✓ Well, my school, which is known as THG Public Schools, is a stone's throw away from my hometown.

The phrase 'with stone throw away' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'a stone's throw away' to indicate a short distance. Also, the sentence needs the verb 'is' to be complete.

× Apart from this my school is not only well renowned in my city but also in the surrounding area apart from this school.

✓ Apart from this, my school is not only well renowned in my city but also in the surrounding area.

The phrase 'apart from this school' at the end is redundant and causes confusion. Also, commas are needed after introductory phrases for clarity.

× First and foremost is that my school is a well renowned not in my city but also over the surrounding area.

✓ First and foremost, my school is well renowned not only in my city but also in the surrounding area.

The phrase 'a well renowned' is incorrect because 'renowned' is an adjective that does not require an article here. Also, 'not only... but also' is the correct correlative conjunction structure.

× Apart from this, the school building is uh, well known for certain reasons like it's a well qualified as well as uh teachers are highly qualified.

✓ Apart from this, the school building is well known for certain reasons, and the teachers are highly qualified.

The phrase 'it's a well qualified' is incorrect and unclear. 'Well qualified' describes teachers, not the building. The sentence is corrected to separate the ideas clearly.

× my school has well qualified teacher who are always available to support students in order to enhance their knowledge.

✓ My school has well qualified teachers who are always available to support students in order to enhance their knowledge.

The singular 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to agree with the plural verb 'are' and the context of multiple teachers.

× teacher makes environment more interesting by providing extra classes as well as by doing interesting activities which makes the interest of students more advanced.

✓ Teachers make the environment more interesting by providing extra classes as well as by conducting interesting activities which increase the students' interest.

The singular 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match the plural subject. Also, 'makes the interest of students more advanced' is awkward; 'increase the students' interest' is clearer.

× if a student have a more interest regarding their study purpose, then they can easily develop their ideas, they can easily gain knowledge as well as they can easily clear their doubts.

✓ If a student has more interest regarding their study purpose, then they can easily develop their ideas, gain knowledge, and clear their doubts.

The singular subject 'student' requires the singular verb 'has'. Also, 'a more interest' is incorrect; 'more interest' is correct without 'a'.