School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and directly address the question first. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about the location and your commute.

예시: My school is located downtown, right in the centre of my hometown. I usually walk there, but sometimes I ride my bicycle. The school has a rich culture and has maintained its traditions for many years.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'moreover', and 'in addition' correctly. Provide specific examples and explain their benefits clearly.

예시: Yes, I like my school very much. Firstly, it is convenient for me to walk there. Moreover, I can join various activities, such as sports, which help improve my physical fitness and mental health. In addition, participating in competitions enhances my skills and confidence.

제안: Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Be specific about teaching methods and their benefits. Keep sentences clear and concise.

예시: Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study. The professional teachers use various teaching techniques, such as visual aids and videos, to make lessons engaging. This approach helps students improve their learning and problem-solving skills.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by adding more specific details and using linking words for coherence. Also, correct minor grammatical errors and use plural forms appropriately.

예시: The environment at my school is comfortable and friendly. The teachers are professionally trained, so students feel comfortable asking questions. Moreover, they organize special sessions to help individuals with their problems.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structures. Provide specific examples and explain the importance of interest in study more explicitly.

예시: I believe interest in studying is very important for learners. When students are interested, they can achieve both professional and personal goals. For example, some may want to work in multinational companies, and with a good education, they can secure jobs that improve their living standards.

× My school is located in the center of the hometown which is usually known as the downtown.

✓ My school is located in the center of the town, which is usually known as downtown.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'hometown' and 'downtown'. 'Hometown' should be 'town' without 'the' because it is a general location, and 'downtown' does not require 'the' when used in this context. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clauses.

× As most of the time I go to school by walking, sometimes I use my bicycle to go to the school.

✓ Since most of the time I go to school by walking, sometimes I use my bicycle to go to school.

The phrase 'by walking' is correct, but 'to the school' should be 'to school' because 'school' as a place of education usually does not require the definite article 'the'. Also, 'As' is better replaced with 'Since' to indicate reason.

× The school has a rich culture and the maintained its values from the last couple of years.

✓ The school has a rich culture and has maintained its values over the last couple of years.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'the maintained' is wrong. The correct form is 'has maintained' to indicate present perfect tense showing an action continuing from the past to present. Also, 'from the last couple of years' should be 'over the last couple of years'.

× First and foremost reason it is very convenient for me to go to school by walk.

✓ First and foremost, it is very convenient for me to walk to school.

The phrase 'by walk' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'to walk'. Also, the sentence needs a comma after 'First and foremost' for clarity.

× Moreover, I can participate in a different activities.

✓ Moreover, I can participate in different activities.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'activities'. 'Different activities' does not require an article.

× For example, participation in a sports activities helps to improve my physical fitness and maintain my mental health.

✓ For example, participation in sports activities helps to improve my physical fitness and maintain my mental health.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'sports activities'. It should be omitted.

× In addition to this, participation of competitions improve my skills such As for.

✓ In addition to this, participation in competitions improves my skills, such as...

The preposition 'of' is incorrect; it should be 'in' for 'participation in competitions'. Also, 'improve' should be 'improves' to agree with the singular subject 'participation'. The phrase 'such As for' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'such as' followed by examples.

× For example, there are different type of the teaching techniques are used by the professional teachers.

✓ For example, there are different types of teaching techniques used by professional teachers.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'. Also, 'the teaching techniques' should be 'teaching techniques' without 'the' because it is general. The phrase 'are used' is redundant with 'there are'; better to say 'used'.

× For example, teachers often use visual aids and videos to make a conversation interesting which helps to improve students improve their learning skills.

✓ For example, teachers often use visual aids and videos to make lessons interesting, which helps students improve their learning skills.

'Make a conversation interesting' is awkward; 'make lessons interesting' is more appropriate. Also, 'helps to improve students improve' is redundant; it should be 'helps students improve'.

× UH participation also helps to improve their problem solving.

✓ Participation also helps to improve their problem-solving skills.

The phrase 'UH participation' seems to be a typo; it should be 'Participation'. Also, 'problem solving' should be hyphenated as 'problem-solving' and 'skills' added for clarity.

× The teachers are so professionally trained that the student do not hesitate to talk with them to clear their doubts.

✓ The teachers are so professionally trained that the students do not hesitate to talk with them to clear their doubts.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural verb 'do not hesitate'.

× Moreover, teachers organize the special sessions to solve the problems of the individuals.

✓ Moreover, teachers organize special sessions to solve individuals' problems.

The definite article 'the' before 'special sessions' and 'problems' is unnecessary. Also, 'problems of the individuals' is better expressed as 'individuals' problems'.

× By studying, they can achieve their goals such as professional and the personal goals.

✓ By studying, they can achieve their goals, such as professional and personal goals.

The definite article 'the' before 'personal goals' is unnecessary. Also, a comma is needed before 'such as'.

× Sometimes a learner wants to do in a multinational company.

✓ Sometimes a learner wants to work in a multinational company.

The verb 'do' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'work' when referring to employment. The preposition 'in' is correct.

× So with the help of the education I have, they can get a job and improve their living standard.

✓ So with the help of the education I have, I can get a job and improve my living standard.

The pronouns are inconsistent; the subject is 'I' but the pronouns switch to 'they' and 'their'. They should be consistent as 'I' and 'my'.