School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤り（"The school I graduated"は不自然）を直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、情報をもう少し具体的にして、簡潔に答えることが大切です。

예시: I graduated from a high school located in Cisco Prefecture, Japan. It is a large school with many students.

제안: 理由の説明が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りがあります。"I graduated because..."は意味が通じません。理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: Yes, I like my school because it is large and has a friendly atmosphere. Also, the school is near the sea, which makes it a pleasant place to study.

제안: 文法と語順の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。"study so harder more other schools"は不自然です。正しい文法で簡潔に理由を述べましょう。

예시: Yes, my school is a good place to study because it offers extra classes after regular lessons, which helps students improve more than in other schools.

제안: 文が重複しており、文法的な誤りもあります。"is my school is located"は間違いです。情報を整理して、簡潔に述べましょう。

예시: My school is located on top of a hill and surrounded by forests. From the third floor, we can see the ocean clearly.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。"Interesting in study"は間違いで、"interest in study"が正しいです。理由を明確にし、文を完成させましょう。

예시: I think interest in studying is very important because it motivates students to learn and improve their skills.

× The school I graduated is located in Cisco Prefecture in Japan.

✓ The school I graduated from is located in Cisco Prefecture in Japan.

The verb 'graduate' requires the preposition 'from' to indicate the institution one has completed. Omitting 'from' leads to an incomplete sentence structure.

× I graduated because it is quite a large school with a lot of students, which creates a library and friendly atmosphere and I can see the sea there.

✓ I like it because it is quite a large school with a lot of students, which creates a lively and friendly atmosphere, and I can see the sea there.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'graduated because' which does not make sense in context. Also, 'creates a library and friendly atmosphere' is incorrect; likely intended 'lively and friendly atmosphere'. Proper conjunctions and word choice improve clarity.

× Yes, my school is a good place to study because it offers extra classes after the regular classes so that the learners can study so harder more other schools.

✓ Yes, my school is a good place to study because it offers extra classes after the regular classes so that learners can study harder than in other schools.

The phrase 'study so harder more other schools' is grammatically incorrect. The correct comparative structure is 'study harder than in other schools'. Also, 'the learners' is better as 'learners' here.

× My school is surrounded by forests and is my school is located in top of hill so we can see the ocean at the third floor of the school.

✓ My school is surrounded by forests and is located on top of a hill, so we can see the ocean from the third floor of the school.

The sentence has repetition ('is my school is') and incorrect prepositions ('in top of hill'). Correct prepositions are 'on top of a hill' and 'from the third floor'. Removing repetition and fixing prepositions improves clarity.

× I'd say that. Interesting in study is so significant thing because. They can be motivated with study.

✓ I'd say that interest in study is a very significant thing because it can motivate people to study.

'Interesting in study' is incorrect; the noun 'interest' should be used. Also, 'so significant thing' needs an article and an adverb: 'a very significant thing'. The sentence fragments are combined for clarity.