School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, for example, avoid repeating phrases like 'center of center'. Also, use correct prepositions and article usage.

예시: My school is located in the south of Kazakhstan, near the city center of my hometown.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts and use proper sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'neither' multiple times unnecessarily.

예시: Unfortunately, I don't like my school because there was a big problem with bullying during my childhood, and neither the teachers nor the administration made any effort to solve it.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'well organized' and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: I don't think my school is the best place to study because the education system is poorly organized. For example, the curriculum lacks a clear academic structure, which makes it difficult for students to fully understand and improve their skills.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and repetitions. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid unnecessary repetition. Also, clarify your last point about 'police' as it is confusing.

예시: The environment in my class was very friendly. I made many friends who were helpful and kind. However, in other schools, there were some issues with discipline.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences. Also, explain your ideas more specifically and avoid redundancy.

예시: I think interest in studying is very important because when a person is interested, they try harder to understand and improve their skills, which leads to success.

× My school is in my hometown is located in a South of Kazakhstan.

✓ My school is in my hometown, which is located in the south of Kazakhstan.

The phrase 'in a South of Kazakhstan' is incorrect because 'south' as a region should not have an article 'a' and needs to be in lowercase. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding 'which is' clarifies the relationship between the hometown and its location.

× It's located nearby center of center of the city.

✓ It's located near the center of the city.

The phrase 'nearby center of center of the city' is redundant and incorrect. 'Nearby' is an adverb and should be followed by a noun with a preposition 'near'. The correct phrase is 'near the center of the city'.

× I Unfortunately I don't because in my childhood there was a big problem with bullying, but neither teachers, neither administration, neither principles did any effort to fix this problem so I really.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't like it because in my childhood there was a big problem with bullying, but neither the teachers, the administration, nor the principals made any effort to fix this problem, so I really disliked it.

The sentence has incorrect use of 'neither... neither... neither' which should be 'neither... nor... nor'. Also, 'principles' is incorrect; it should be 'principals'. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished properly. Additionally, 'did any effort' is incorrect; 'made any effort' is correct.

× neither teachers, neither administration, neither principles did any effort to fix this problem

✓ neither the teachers, the administration, nor the principals made any effort to fix this problem

The phrase 'did any effort' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'made any effort'. Also, 'neither... neither... neither' should be 'neither... nor... nor' for listing negatives.

× I don't think my school is the best place to study because the education system is not well organized.

✓ I don't think my school is the best place to study because the education system is not well organized.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× For example, the curriculum lacks well organized academic structure, so this means students will fail to fully understand and improve their academic skills.

✓ For example, the curriculum lacks a well-organized academic structure, so this means students will fail to fully understand and improve their academic skills.

The phrase 'lacks well organized academic structure' is missing an article 'a' and 'well organized' should be hyphenated as 'well-organized' because it is a compound adjective modifying 'academic structure'.

× So as a result, my.

✓ So as a result, my academic performance suffered.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. It needs to be completed to convey the intended meaning.

× Environments actually in my class was very friendly We I I have made a lot of friends in during during the school and they are really helpful and kind.

✓ The environment in my class was very friendly. I have made a lot of friends during school, and they are really helpful and kind.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'Environments' should be singular 'environment'; 'We I I' is a repetition error; 'in during during the school' is redundant and incorrect preposition use. The sentence is split for clarity and corrected for grammar and word choice.

× But in other schools they were some police which are could.

✓ But in other schools, there were some policies which could be improved.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'They were some police' is incorrect; likely the intended word is 'policies'. 'Which are could' is ungrammatical. The correction assumes the intended meaning and corrects pronoun and verb usage.

× Personally, I think it's really important because when a individual will try to understand and to improve academic skills by reading the special subject, it will he will be successed.

✓ Personally, I think it's really important because when an individual tries to understand and improve academic skills by studying a special subject, he will be successful.

The article 'a' before 'individual' should be 'an' because 'individual' starts with a vowel sound. 'Will try' is changed to 'tries' to match the present simple tense for general truths. 'Reading the special subject' is awkward; 'studying a special subject' is more appropriate. 'He will be successed' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'successful'.